Nowadays, many school leavers have a tendency to go travelling or work for a period of time before going to university directly.
Doing this can be both beneficial and harmful in many ways.
There are a number of advantages of taking a gap year to go travelling or work before going to university directly. Firstly, by having a part-time job, some students who do not what they like after graduating, can experience more in real life. Therefore, they can gain more knowledge in every aspects and also definitely realise the real strengthen of them. This will take a true direction for future of theirselves. For instance, many students in Vietnam who after leaving high school, also take a chance to experience to many jobs such as selling coffee, serving for many hotels in order to learn something new. By doing this, there are more convenient for them to choose what is really suitable for them.
Secondly, it is beneficial for young leavers to take trips to another country simply because they can be exposed to different cultures, new lifestyles. Thanks to travel to places to places, they would be more mature, more confident and more indepent. With lessons they have from this, there are more chances for them to be employeed by multinational corporates.
On the other hand, doing this brings certain drawbacks. If students who after leaving schools take years to go travelling too much before going to university, they will be addicted to go and go. In this way, it dissolve their lifestyle. So they will lose the motivation for studying and tend to drop out the university. This leads them to be unemployment.
In conclusion, while students after leave school to go travel or work in a period time to go university directly can be beneficial, it also has several drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88815789474 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71874552249 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6874713815 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4117647059 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8823529412 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364367841343 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12245965276 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142610425242 0.0667982634062 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230750194725 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156840633091 0.056905535591 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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