What is the most important thing to effectively learn and excel into life? Passion and zeal, right? As many great scholars have said it before, "People should follow their area of interest and they will succeed in that arena regardless of the circumstances they face." The prompt suggest that college students should learn subjects which they love and not to follow the path or opt for subjects just because they are most likely to lead to jobs. In my opinion, I strongly agree to this claim and believe that students should look inward and not outward when choosing college courses for two reasons.
To begin with, From the early age students are taught to follow the career which is most likely to be the next "boom" factor. While doing this students are not asked about their area of interest and they are forced to follow the rat race for the rest of their lives. For example, In 1980's there was this trend about people opting for Nuclear Science and Engineering because at that time it had great demands for those engineers. But, as the years passed, Nuclear Sciences and Engineering was diminishing and soon it was at nadir facing serious job issues. So it is clearly evident from this example, trends and demand for sectors are fickle. They change over period of time and just by considering the "hot" and so called "trending" factor of the market scenarios, one should not follow the courses which they think has great potential without considering their forte.
Furthermore, When students pursue subjects which interest them or say they enjoy their work, they are likely to succeed and work with ardent and passion. Interest and love for the area make people happy and they don't envy their tasks and work they do . However, when you think about the monetary benefits you are going to achieve when you follow the path which is influenced by the surrounding factors or say trending jobs, you are less likely to succeed. Because what is good for others or has great demand does not mean that everyone pursuing it is going to be great at it. It is always said that, when you work in the area of your interest, you try to think about creative ideas, innovation and get to the zenith of it. So it is best to follow your interest and try to excel into it, as you will probably be happy doing the work you love despite of circumstances and other factors affecting it.
Of course some argue that one should take courses which are demanding but isn't this a short term trend? What are the possibilities that the sector which is thriving now has long term future and its going to be at apogee forever. Is it sensible to not follow your interest considering some short term or transient trends and demand for jobs? No, It is not. So I believe one should follow their passion and interest. If we do so we are likely to compete at the highest level and carve out a niche for ourselves in this increasingly "globalised world".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, for example, of course, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74181117534 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55251862508 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45472061657 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0390417626 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.863636364 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5909090909 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195107539848 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590073762882 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534081715291 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133245216051 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519138504206 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.