Nowadays, many education experts claim that non-test, art-related subjects such as art, music, and handicraft should be put into practice in the secondary school system as these activities are believed to enhance students' academic scores. In my view, I am partially convinced by the statement for some reasons.
First of all, making art-relatED subjects obligatory would create a massive burden for students since the official compulsory subjectS like math, chemistry, physics, or English are already HARD to follow. In reality, the majority of universities in Vietnam are educating colleges pursuing science professions involving physicianS, engineerS, biologistS, or accountantS. However, the number for art schoolS seems TO BE MARGINAL. For instance, ACCORDING TO A SURVEY DONE BY A LOCAL MAGAZINE, 100.000 science professors are trained a year, whereas the FIGURE for the artistS AND musicianS seems to be over a thousand annually. For that reason, students would prefer logical fields to artistic majors.
On the other hand, switching OPTIONAL subjects to the obligatory ONES would encourage gifted students like cleverness or drawing. When it comes to the Vietnam teaching method, we usually think of the plain dreary theory classes. Students have to spend many hours in those classes rather than having practical lessonS. Hence, changing the PRIORITY of compulsory subjects will create a new playground for students and improve academic scores for those who love the arts. For instance, many experts divide intelligence into nine categories, but education in Vietnam only focuses on two types: logical intelligence and verbal intelligence. Perhaps, if the education system could widen the essential subject spectrum and reduce the volume of knowledge, then it would be helpful for art lovers.
In conclusion, I admit that science classes exert a direct influence on the development of a nation. However, ART also plays an equally important role in the education system as it could help students to be creative and improvE their ACADEMIC PERFORMANCE.
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- Some educationalists argue that non exam art based subjects such as music drama art and craft should be compulsory in the secondary school curriculum They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance To what extent do you 89
- Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem To what extent do you agree whit this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledg 56
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56962025316 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83122284266 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613924050633 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9595569222 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.73333333333 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195052885984 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062237005292 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905316964774 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14319819286 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104181291773 0.056905535591 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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