Some people think that good health is very important to every person so medical service should not be run by profit making companies

Nowadays, many people feel that health is very important for each individual because the profit-marking companies do not be run healthcare services. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I believe that these are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are a number of major drawbacks when people choose private healthcare services will get a private room equipped with advanced facilities, while patients in public hospitals often have to share their room with five to even ten people. Living in a private room helps people feel more comfortable and relaxed, contributing to their recovery process. Some people who choose their chosen doctor would give them a feeling of safety and reassurance. For example, my brother is sick, he chose private healthcare services to lead to better treatment outcomes.
on the other hand, I believe that benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. The first drawback is that not everyone can afford private healthcare services. The costs of treatment in a private hospital are often double or triple that of a public hospital. Secondly, private healthcare contributes to widening the gap between rich and poor due to the fact that only wealthy people over private treatment costs. Low-income people could get into serious debt if choosing a private healthcare service. Some people argue that private healthcare systems focus on maximizing their health because they target wealthy people as their potential clients. Some people living in the poor shouldn't pay for private healthcare services because it is very expensive.
In conclusion, I would argue that good health is most important for people, due to t the private healthcare service can exist, brings more benefits than drawbacks.

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Average: 8.2 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35379061372 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7739401289 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56678700361 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8830680315 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.928571429 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174938747398 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674485725393 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740378597218 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135342215767 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680796400771 0.056905535591 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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