The argument presents several unwarranted assumptions regarding the public’s lack of awareness being the sole cause of abated attendees in the past years movie show. The author’s claim, the company’s movies are of good quality and the obliviousness of the public as a cause for the company’s audience reduction plus his/her recommendation - greater funds should be pushed to advertising - are flawed and gives room for several questions that must be addressed in order to assess the viability of his/her claim and recommendation.
Firstly, there is less proper statistical proof to corroborate the authors conclusion. Last years movies might have had higher negative review percentage though there was an increase in its positive review - to what extent is not mentioned by the author. The author should have mentioned the number of attendees for last year’s and its preceding years, the number of movies reviewed and the number of movie reviewers. The difference between last years attendees and the other past years might be negligible - maybe a difference of 2% reduction. It’s uncertain the number of movies reviewed - a smaller number may attract fewer audience as everyone has different type of movie of interest.
Secondly, the argument is narrowed and ineffectual in a sense that it fails to acknowledge a couple of factors that may have caused reduced attendees. Of such is the cost of a movie. Last years movie may have had a higher cost compared to the other years. People may have, due to a change in the economy, less income disposed into social amenities and entertainment and for that matter the reduction in attendees, albeit fully aware of available quality movies. The climate, time and setting of the movie show last year may have been unfavorable to the majority. Much information is needed to justify the argument.
Furthermore, the author assumes that increased public awareness directly proportional to increased audience. Such assumption, though conscionable, lacks evidence or data to attest such linear relationship and how and to what extent does allocating greater proportion of the company’s budget to advertising affects the company’s quota is clearly unknown in the passage. Whether such recommendation is feasible in a short or long time, whether the company’s sponsors are willing to cooperate and advocate such action, whether the number of audience will drastically increase to what’s expected - as to meet losses that may be accumulated by the company in implementing such action - is abstract and no such information is given to guarantee the success of taking such action.
In conclusion, the arguments needs to be backed by convincing information in order to precisely assess the viability of the recommendation. This is imperative for determine the best and feasible solution to the reduced audience of Super Screen-produced movies.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2366 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.899 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.242 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.302 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...e cause of abated attendees in the past years movie show. The author’s claim, the com...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ood quality and the obliviousness of the public as a cause for the company’s audi...
^^
Line 2, column 68, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...er statistical proof to corroborate the authors conclusion. Last years movies might hav...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...s. Of such is the cost of a movie. Last years movie may have had a higher cost compar...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt does allocating greater proportion of the company’s budget to advertising affe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36563876652 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04207024089 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.2180475294 57.8364921388 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130008534483 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423643353654 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379771031695 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715823414473 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254070952264 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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