The graph below show the proportion of the population aged 54 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three differents countries

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The graph below show the proportion of the population aged 54 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three differents countries.

The given line chart compares the percentage of people aged 65 and above in three different nations Janpan, Sweden, USA over a period of one hundred years from 1940 with prediction to 2040.
Overall, what stands out from the chart is that there are upward trends in all figure. Also, the data of Japan started at lowest point, but that is expected to reach the highest point in the last year.
One of the first things to note is that the proportion of poplulation aged 65 and over was highest at roughly 9%, followed by those of Sweden with over 7% and Japan 5% in 1940. As for 1980, there were gradual rises in the data of USA and Sweden account for 15% and about 14% respectively, while the figure for Japan went down slightly to roughly 3%, a degree of 2%.
In the next 40 years, from 1980 to 2020, the amount of old people continued to grow steadily about 6% in Sweden and that of USA almost remained unchanged. However, aged population in Japan experienced a moderate increase to around 8%.
In the last year, the statistics for Swedent is expected to grow to 25%, it is higher than that of USA around 2%. On the other hand, the figure for Janpan is predicted to hit the highest point at below 28%

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'reach the highest'.
Suggestion: reach the highest
...t lowest point, but that is expected to reach highest point in the last year. One of the fir...
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Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'predicted'.
Suggestion: predicted
...he other hand, the figure for Janpan is predict to hit a highest point at below 28%
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Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...the figure for Janpan is predict to hit a highest point at below 28%
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dict to hit a highest point at below 28%
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, as for, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 223.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38565022422 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24916392509 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569506726457 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9418211072 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.666666667 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142412781438 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567630369682 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749434412269 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755819879655 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681353898392 0.0819641961636 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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