young people today are less dependent on their parents compared to the past.
Some people claim that young people are more rely on their parent than in the past because the society becomes more dangerous. However, I strongly agree with the opinion young people in these days act more independent to their parents than before. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will mention in this essay.
First of all, the time that spend with their parents decline than in the past. Obviously, young people in these days spend their time on school or work place. So, they have much time without their parents so they have to make choice without parent’s opinion. This make young people more independent. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. When I was high school student, I spend most of hours in the school. I did not have cellphone so I had to make decision without parent’s advice. If I had not gone to school and staied at home, I would depend on my parent’s advice. However, I had to study at school until night, I do not have time with my parent, this make me more dependent.
Second, young people study how to make their own choice. Some day, they have to live without others advice or support. So, in these days, one of their own decision without affection from others is one of the main factors that young people learn at school. Evidently, the young people become more independent in this process. There was a survey conducted by a group of psychology major with 300 teachers as respondents. The goal of the survey was to know their thought about caricculam associated independence. About 97% of respondents claimed that there is special class that help students to become more independent at their school. Also, about 87% of teachers claimed that this class make them to feel their students more independent. This proves that younger people can become more independent than in the past.
In conclusion, I believe that young people who live in this century are more independent than in the past. First reason is that the time that they have along with delcines and second reason is that they learn how to behave independently in their school from young age.
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- young people today are less dependent on their parents compared to the past 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the hours') or simply say ''most hours''.
Suggestion: most of the hours; most hours
...When I was high school student, I spend most of hours in the school. I did not have cellphone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, as to, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73712737127 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43105593841 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433604336043 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9285019153 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.0 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0434782609 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284179122979 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101253952135 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804362925086 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206435445015 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410317652862 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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