Environmental problems ore too big for individual countries and
individual persons to address. ln other words, we hove reached the
stage where the only way to protect the environment is at on
international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this
opinion?
Climate change is a phenomenon affecting all people in all walks of life, from individual citizens to whole
countries and huge multinational companies. Therefore,I disagree with the notion that the only way to
address the environmental problems is at international level. I firmly believe that this colossal problem can
only be handled if all individuals contribute; all governments take steps at national level and also join hands
at an international level.
Undoubtedly, gigantic steps need to be taken, and are being taken at the international level. The 'COP2f in
Paris in November 2015 is a step in this direction. The aim of 'COP2f is well known: to reach a universal
agreement limiting the rise in global average temperature to 2'C above pre-industrial levels. All nations are
realizing that climate change is one of the greatest challenges faced by mankind today.
Many steps can be taken at the national level. Governments can aware people of the benefits of using
energy efficient devices. For instance, this year government of India gave 2 LED bulbs to each government
employee at Rs 10/- each under the "Prakash Path" scheme. The cost of each bulb is Rs 400/-. The cost will
be recovered by adding a very small amount in each month's electricity bill for about a year. ln about 100
cities, the streetlights have been replaced with LED bulbs, which is a saving of a huge amount per day. LED
bulbs use a tenth of electricity as compared to other bulbs. Once people realize that by using LED bulbs,
their electricity bills will reduce, they will be prepared to make the initial heavy investment also.
Although the international and national level steps are imperative, it is also a fact that individual action
combined with governmental action can do a lot more to prevent climate change than if individual citizens
were not involved. ln a world of six billion people, if everyone stopped wasting water, disposed off their
rubbish properly, started accepting recycled material and stopped succumbing to consumerism, then it
would go a long way in solving the problem of environment.
Summing up, individual citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else's responsibility to protect the
environment; we must all play our part - individual citizens and governments at the national and
international level.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...bove pre-industrial levels. All nations are realizing that climate change is one of the great...
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Line 13, column 52, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'months'' or 'month's'?
Suggestion: months'; month's
...d by adding a very small amount in each months electricity bill for about a year. ln a...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ln
...nths electricity bill for about a year. ln about 100 cities, the streetlights hav...
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Line 16, column 97, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ed to make the initial heavy investment also. Although the international and nation...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ln
...individual citizens were not involved. ln a world of six billion people, if every...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.0 286% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 5.60731707317 321% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 965.302439024 206% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 381.0 196.424390244 194% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20734908136 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 3.73543355544 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00084963709 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 106.607317073 204% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57217847769 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 283.868780488 214% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9017790287 43.030603864 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.222222222 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 3.83414634146 600% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235121562257 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696008058515 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087054330436 0.0843802449381 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0666210127667 0.15604864568 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600812206524 0.0819641961636 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 40.7170731707 231% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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