In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing
The argument that suggest a way of encouraging Autotech to build its automile manufacturing plant in Hillview landfill in order to ameliorate the pressing issue of unemployment in the area, is not entirely logically convincing since it fails to mention some crucial assumptions, some of which if found not to be true will affect the soundness of the argument.
Firstly, the argument rely on a casual assumptions that buildng an automobile manufacturing plant would leads to reducing unemployement in the area. The argument fails to mention how this can be achieve, what gives them the assurance that the automobile firm will employ the resident of the area. Questions like, has Autotech done similar thing before, where he employ large percentage of the unemployed people living in the vicinity of one of her plant? what is the proportion of the autotech automobile plant in relation to the number of unemployed citizen? what percentage of the people can the capacity of the plant accomodate, 2%, 5%, or may be 80%? are the unemployed citizen possess the skills require to work in an automobile firm? These questions and others need to be answered with a positive tone before the city council can authorize the campaign or promise to offer significant incentive, in order not to be rash with the decision.
Secondly, the argument also pinpoint an analogy assumption by comparing the Computech company to Autotech manufacturing company. It assumed that Autotech would be capable to put to job the thousands people left unemployed by the Computech, it fails to shows a relationship between the two companies in terms of the size, capital, technical relationship, etc. It also fails to mention the reason for computech abandonment of its national facilities, may be the area doesn't yield profit for the company, may be it liquidate. Will knowing the true reason for her abandonment of its national facility yield a positive effect or negative on the prosperous automobile company? Addressing this issue and providing sounds answer to these questions can strengthen the proposal.
Lastly, the argument fails to inform us if Autotech company is currently in search for a place to build a new manufacturing plant, in order to think of encouraging them to the town. We need to know the current plan of the automobile firm, in terms of expanding the plant to know if it would be sound to go on with authorizing the campaign.
In conclusion, this argument would be strengthen if the response to the questions raised above is found to be positive, otherwise, it can lead to rejecting or weakens the author's proposal.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2131 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.921 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.883 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.107 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.178 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument that suggest a way of encouraging Autotech to build i...
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Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...some crucial assumptions, some of which if found not to be true will affect the so...
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Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'assumption'?
Suggestion: assumption
... Firstly, the argument rely on a casual assumptions that buildng an automobile manufacturin...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uildng an automobile manufacturing plant would leads to reducing unemployement in...
^^
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...n automobile manufacturing plant would leads to reducing unemployement in the area. ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'employs'.
Suggestion: employs
...ech done similar thing before, where he employ large percentage of the unemployed peop...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...ng in the vicinity of one of her plant? what is the proportion of the autotech autom...
^^^^
Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...on to the number of unemployed citizen? what percentage of the people can the capaci...
^^^^
Line 3, column 657, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...lant accomodate, 2%, 5%, or may be 80%? are the unemployed citizen possess the skil...
^^^
Line 3, column 711, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'working'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: working
...oyed citizen possess the skills require to work in an automobile firm? These questions ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'show'.
Suggestion: show
...nemployed by the Computech, it fails to shows a relationship between the two companie...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ts national facilities, may be the area doesnt yield profit for the company, may be it...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ea doesnt yield profit for the company, may be it liquidate. Will knowing the true rea...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 172, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...it can lead to rejecting or weakens the authors proposal.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93869455908 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474537037037 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.525400764 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.6875 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253111341468 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898101212595 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068385506285 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149198327 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770639128429 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 12.3882235529 165% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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