Nowadays, people are attempting to be successful in their lives by using different methods. In this regard, some persons believe that people who have many different skills are more successful than people who develop only one skill, while others hold the opposite supposition. When it comes to me, I concur with the former group. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint with two specific reasons.
First of all, a person who has diverse skills is more eligible to get a preferable job than someone who has just one skill. Because of the modern world, jobs and careers are complicated, and companies need persons with more than one skill. Also, employers prefer a person with different abilities in order to reduce their costs rather than hiring some candidates that every person has one skill. As a result, people who develop many different skills have a higher chance to win interviews. My personal experience may shed more light on this matter. When I was a bachelor student, I just learned one software, Matlab, during my studies. After graduation, I could not find my preferable job because companies needed some persons who knew different software and had diverse skills. Had I developed different abilities, I would have had a good job.
Secondly, an individual who develops many skills can easily be promoted in his or her career than a person with one skill. To be more specific, companies have different parts, and each of these sections has different duties. If one person wants to be their manager and get a higher position, for example, he or she should have all abilities and knows professionally about their knowledge. Accordingly, developing different skills can help people to promote easily than others. For instance, NASA has diverse sections in order to build a robot that will explore Mars. These parts include Mechanical engineering, Electrical Engineering, Material Engineering, and so on. NASA's high manager, Mr. Robert, has knowledge about all of these areas of science. This shows that in order to promote in a system, people should have different skills.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I firmly believe that people equipped with different abilities are more victorious than people who focus on one skill only. Not only, are these individuals more preferable ones in the hiring process, but also, they get a promotion more easily than persons with one skill.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...me persons believe that people who have many different skills are more successful than peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42857142857 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98081713984 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556390977444 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1963693714 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4545454545 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.529870912107 0.236089414692 224% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16338631418 0.076458572812 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172705157031 0.0737576698707 234% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.385726512775 0.150856017488 256% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813365926363 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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