The increase in people’s life expectancy means that they have to work until an older age to pay for their retirement. One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age. Is this alternative a positive or negative development?
The longevity of people tends to boost which means they need to work more than before if they want to retire at an older age. Instead, people should begin working at a younger age. While working longer at an older age seems a good idea, I strongly believe that the alternative is more reasonable and practical.
On the one hand, it makes a huge chance to get basic jobs for students who can not go to school. Students who failed graduation in high schools need to work to lower the pressure on their families. For instance, there are many sewing or electricity factories in Viet Nam which have personnal recruitment for those who don't graduate. As a result, they can work enthusiastically in younger and retire at the right time.
On the other hand, it is not only the unemployment rate but also the number of criminals can be reduced that help our life can be safer. Almost pickpockets and stealers want to kidnap us due to the fact that they don't have money in spite of lack of food. Poor children are taught to do some tricks in the public area to live day by day so the government should have solutions to help them have a good job.
In conclusion, by working in younger, people can have good conditions to improve their lives and be equipped life skills early. My view is that this opinion is totally essential for a positive development which benefits all members of society.
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- The increase in people s life expectancy means that they have to work until an older age to pay for their retirement One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age Is this alternative a positive or negative development 61
- The increase in people s life expectancy means that they have to work until an older age to pay for their retirement One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age Is this alternative a positive or negative development 61
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1137.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.548 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51907602108 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3720920611 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.75 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395514299286 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136948951398 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105083924081 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218229360002 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138600813044 0.056905535591 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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