Despite making strides in agriculture advancement, a large number of people suffer starving. I believe that many reasons are responsible for it two of which are unfair technology distribution and wealthy people's consumerism.
Almost all technologies are found in affluent countries. Although we live in a technology-focused world, all people, especially poor people, do not access them. Therefore, starving would be eradicated if the undeveloped countries were equipped with high-end cultivating tools. On the other hand, these equipment are just manufactured by wealthy and industrialized countries, so tackling this problem is dependent on their determination. For instance, a country like England that achieved success in the production of genetically modified foods can share its facilities and knowledge with a country like Uganda that suffered starving to alleviate this problem.
Consumerism in rich countries has become a big problem for poor countries. In spite of production the huge amount of crops, many people consume more than their needs. It is a shame that they waste a lot of food every year, although many people succumb each year due to hungry-related illnesses. While if the affluent nations consume food properly, there will be more foods for the less affluent nations certainly. For example, the traditional American celebration is known Super bowl where people waste huge amounts of food and beverages yearly, while they could use this food to survive a lot of people in other places in the world.
In conclusion, technology could play a crucial role to alleviate poverty provided that destitute countries have access to them, and also people wasting food should change their approach to consuming food.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ing strides in agriculture advancement, a large number of people suffer starving. I believe that ...
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Line 2, column 296, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'these equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; these equipments
...d cultivating tools. On the other hand, these equipment are just manufactured by wealthy and in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4552238806 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0234105512 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623134328358 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1485134555 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.461538462 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165868087289 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560316636595 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332684185231 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896307450519 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427233551638 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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