Beyond a shadow of a doubt, in last few decades, with the advent of modernization, people’s lives have been changed drastically. Actually, nowadays, .. In this regard, a plethora of people possess the conviction that having a extraornidary materials in life have been give more importance. On the otherside, another group of people take it as an exaggeration and think in an opposite manner. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that irrefutably, technological expontantial growth has a significant effect on people’s minds. To be more speciific, in the current era, people have been seriously following their social media such as Instragram, facebook, and etc whereby they get into touch with whole world by sitting at home. Consequently, people can get easily infleuce from other influencer or famous celebrities on social media, and apparently, want to live the similar life like them. To shed more light on this, my brother’s example is utterly a comelling example of what have been elaborated obove. He used live a simple and ordinary life earlier, however, while age, he started using Instragram whereby his thought process and mind set was thoroughly changed in a short time. Now, he was extensively influenced by his favourite actor and wanted to buy a same sport car that the celebrity has owned. Not only this but also, his got the same hair cut and dress up similary way because he assumes that he can attract other people and could probably become famous like the celebrity. Thus, this incidence enforces me to believe that people do certain things in their life because they think other people would judge them and they can be famous influencer in the life.
Another noteworthy point striking in my mind is that it is fact that rising economy all over the globe is one of the factors that contributes to accomplish wealthy and high-stardard life in the community. In the past, only few people in the society was able to live spectacular and rich lifestyle since most of them used to earn minimal wedge whereby they could hardly survive for the month. However, nowadays, having a higher education and more opportunities at workplace, people can buy everythings what them dream for in the life. In fact, those who cannot afford such to wear or brand such highly priced pruducts are considered as a low-class people. To exemplify, a date statistics collected from a research that is cunducted at the University of California indicates that approximately 83% of women want to wear clothes from the most expensive brands in the world. What is more, these women are capable enough to buy such splendid products from their own income. Therefore, it is judicious to say that people are expriecing wealthy lives due to having a better job opportunities compared to the past.
To recapitulate, from contamplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoit, I redically posit that people want to live a rich lifestyle in the current scenarios. This is because most of people are earning well to buy certain expensive brands, and social media plays a vital role to influence them.
- TOEFL T P O 21 Integrated Writing Task 52
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...hanged drastically. Actually, nowadays, .. In this regard, a plethora of people po...
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Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ople possess the conviction that having a extraornidary materials in life have be...
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Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an opposite manner" with adverb for "opposite"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...le take it as an exaggeration and think in an opposite manner. Certainly, from my vantage point, the ...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...asily infleuce from other influencer or famous celebrities on social media, and apparently, want t...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...plify, a date statistics collected from a research that is cunducted at the University of ...
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Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... the current scenarios. This is because most of people are earning well to buy certain expensi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in fact, such as, in spite of, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2774.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02536231884 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80496569248 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534420289855 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 878.4 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7255311243 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.090909091 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0909090909 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271031009287 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707391773279 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550502179725 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160181815684 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355293387942 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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