Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the current century, people involve themselves in the plethora of works based upon the need and desires and with or without the particular objectives. Concerning to the current people, although some may accede with the fact that people fulfill all their required duties rather focusing on the things that affords the personal enjoyments, I personally argue that people are truly being ignorant on their objectives investing majority of time in their personal enjoyment. I will substantiate my particular position in the subsequent paragraphs.
The foremost reason why I am in support with the idea is: people tend to deviate from their long term career paths being blindly grounded on the short term joy; surely, technology played the great role in this. For the supporting example one need no look further than my neighborhood scenario. The son of the ex-army officer, who took computer applications coursework as the major in his undergraduate study, dropped out his study in mid-way being extensively addicted to online gaming. Not only he forfeit his study but also his health get deteriorated to the large extent in expense to the short term fun with his friends. As a result, he is undergoing a serious psychiatric treatment in the hospital.
Another subtle reason that strengthens my argument is that individuals are not updating themselves with the time; rather they are devoting more time on the leisure activities. The evident example can been seen in the current government employees here in Nepal. Having occupied the position from past 15 years, some people were found, upon inspection, gossiping about the current government leadership and scrolling through the social media sites. Surprisingly, the operating system in the desktop dates back to 90's. They are highly reluctant to update themselves with the time. Obviously, it would be highly fruitful if they learned about the advanced computer systems and basics of the programming language which would have resulted in the efficient functioning of the government systems.
The lack of urge to contribute to the societal impact is the final reason that will substantiate my position. The way youths are approaching the adulthood seems to lack the incentive to contribute to the society through their acquired knowledge and skills. For instance, spending time in catering research skills and programming skills would surely impact the aspects of society to a great extent. Instead, youths choose to go and party with the friends as a means of personal enjoyment. As a results, youth will have less time on focusing towards such motives that would have influenced the shape of society to a great extent.
Taking into account of above stated reasons, I strongly argue that the peoples are extremely ignorant about their deeds spending more time on the personal enjoyment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[4]
Message: Did you mean 'can be' or 'has been'?
Suggestion: can be; has been
...leisure activities. The evident example can been seen in the current government employee...
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Line 7, column 492, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...ds as a means of personal enjoyment. As a results, youth will have less time on focusing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, then, for instance, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25438596491 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7381877877 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548245614035 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5956068746 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.8 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132081425942 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374678541885 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038086667944 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711740281824 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245883554 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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