It is better to work for a business owned by someone you do not know than to work for a business owned by your family.
Undoubtedly, work plays a significant role in people's daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. Some people think that it is better to work for a business owned by your family than to work for a business owned by someone you do not know, while others do not. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that working for a family business is better. There are several reasons as follows.
First of all, working for a business owned by someone who we do not know makes people more competitive and efficient. Workers should think about their business owners because if they do not do their best at work and then they can be fired. However, if you work for your family, you may think that your family cannot fire you. This difference makes you competitive in the workplace. Take my cousin, for example. She, who was working at my aunt's Chinese restaurant, used to lazy and selfish. After the Chinese restaurant was closed, she started working at an Italian restaurant, but she soon got fired due to her lack of skills. She realized that she was not a good worker. Again, she got a job in another Italian restaurant and started doing her best at the workplace by spending more time thinking about how to make better foods more quickly and how to deliver foods in time. As a result, her boss made a decision to increase her salary as she became competitive and contributed to the business. If she had worked only for her mother's restaurant, she would not have improved her abilities for business.
In addition, working for a business owned by someone who we do not know helps people to broaden their social network, which could result in a better result in life. In the workplace, people who work for a business owned by someone people do not know can expose people to an environment where people can meet more diverse people, than a situation where people work with their family. Such widen social network may lead to new success in life. For instance, my cousin met diverse people associated with the fields of delivery, procurement, and marketing while working in an Italian restaurant. One of the acquaintances who she met while working in the restaurant suggested she start a new business. Since she was satisfied with her job, she rejected it. Instead, she introduced the acquaintance to her mother for starting her new business. Consequently, my aunt has opened a tea store that provides delicious teas at lower prices thanks to the supply from the acquaintance and the store is so successful so far. If my cousin had not worked in a restaurant owned by someone she did not know, her mother would not have had that success.
All things considered, I adamantly believe that the advantages of working for a business owned by someone who we do not know far outweigh those of working for a family business for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, the importance of who to work with cannot be overestimated in life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...ho work for a business owned by someone people do not know can expose people to an env...
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Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: ABOUT_WHO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of whom to'?
Suggestion: of whom to
...ioned above. All in all, the importance of who to work with cannot be overestimated in li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65103189493 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55114773703 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435272045028 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6050845884 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8148148148 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7407407407 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517812800293 0.236089414692 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157532029701 0.076458572812 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.191426275062 0.0737576698707 260% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.42255246887 0.150856017488 280% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135290340046 0.0645574589148 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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