People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No, I do not agree with the statement that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than duties and obligations.To justify my views, points are as below.
First, it is true that there are technologically advanced gadgets available today, such as OOT platforms and other apps which have enhanced personal enjoyment to another level. having said that, we have similar apps that help us to track the whereabouts of our dear ones. this is a part of our familial duties. With the help of internet, it's easier to connect with our loved ones and keep in touch with them, which would not have been possible in earlier times. this means, that even when people are staying far from each other, they can still participate in rituals and ceremonies by virtual attendance.
For example, with the help of skype or whatsapp, a grandparent can easily attend his grandkid's birthday party virtually without having any regrets about staying far.
Second, on similar lines to paragraph 1, if you are staying away from your loved one,and it's their birthday you can easily buy a gift, or order a cake, without dissapointng them.
Third, there are a lot of family vacation packages designed by tour operators that take care of yours as well as your family's enjoyment. Though, it's true that there are different activites that appeal to an individual as compared to a family, taking kids to a place such as Disneyland would appeal to everyone.
Lastly, one of the important things that come to my mind when it comes to duties is supporting your family financially. it's far easier to transfer money to anyone in any part of the world, and that too in an instant. Also, because of advancements in transport, we are able to work in different parts of the world but able to reach our home quickly in case of any emergency. this would not have been possible in earlier days.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, second, so, still, third, well, for example, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81846153846 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5387020865 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587692307692 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9891710326 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.857142857 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135980275468 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415451424935 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785431526003 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744792086558 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105890253106 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.