Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Our current way of life will have a negative impact on future generations.
There is no definite answer regarding if our current way of life will have a negative effect on future generations. Some people may think that our way of life is innocuous to future generations, while others believe that it hurts them. In my opinion, I agree with the latter for several reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, countless 3C products will have a negative influence on the environment in the future. To be more concise, smartphones contain a few toxic metals and chemicals, and the rate of changing a phone is so rapid that people usually buy a new phone every two years. After getting the new phone, the old one will be sent to landfills; as a result, the toxic metals and chemicals will decompose in the soil and contaminate it. Drawing from a well-known study, all people discard about a hundred million cell phones every year in the United States; not only causing stress on landfills but also having a negative impact on the soil. For this reason, our current way of life has a detrimental influence on future generations. (Should be a personal example)
Furthermore, the overcutting of trees will have a detrimental effect on our health in the future. Nowadays, students have to read tons of books made from trees. In other words, the more books people make, the more trees they cut down. As the number of trees decreases, there are not enough trees to absorb carbon dioxide and reduce it. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I remember that when I was in the last semester of high school, a great number of books were discarded and piled up like huge hills, indicating a huge number of trees had been cut down. Consequently, people will be exposed to the air filled with carbon dioxide, causing dry throat and pneumonia. It’s certainly clear to see why our current way of life will have a negative effect on future generations.
Admittedly, some people may oppose me regarding this statement. For instance, people could reduce the rate of changing a new phone and get second-hand books from students who are graduated. However, it is impossible to force people to stop changing their phones; not all students accept receiving old books. Hence, I am of the opinion that our current way of life harms the future generation because of the need for smartphones and books.
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing During the past year Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where the work shifts are one hour shorter than our 73
- People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 66
- People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 58
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition 50
- People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 50
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, well, while, for instance, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78896882494 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6394218354 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508393285372 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4256434398 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.85 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.21951772744 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306242136766 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990205342357 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109468336628 0.0758088955206 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197509737769 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817730267266 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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