Students should fund their education with part-time work that they do while they study
The education system in our society is getting all over place and has crept in a student's to an extent that they need to think only about their grades and academics to have a good future. This pressure has been intense and mandatory as well. The education system is stricter these days and modernized as well with the advancement of technology. The digitization has also crept in our lives letting us all depend on it and it demands us to up to mark and updated no matter who we are and what place are we in. The education system is no different and not spared by the technology advancement and hence the increasing cost and the jobs of today's parents are leveling up and pay them more as they work so hard for getting a good and secured future of their children.
The dependency of the students' at home is only monetarily these days until they stand on their own feet. Emotional as well as psychological dependency has just taken a leap of faith and has been only decreasing exponentially with the times. That is why people thin why not make their children completely free and have them stand on their own feet right from they turn 18 (mostly in western countries). This is due to the "less dependency" and "being independent" thought of being the new cool.
The education system is so strict and pressure intense that students really find no time to get involved in even extra co-curricular activities. There is a lot to "study". The digitization in schools right from the start when a child enters the school is very intensive and it enforces students to do the best at academics in this highly modernized world and if not, the thought of lagging behind may "eat them up". So, along with it, the thought of living all by themselves and raising fund for themselves for school and tuition is not a very good idea.
Parents have been supportive in case of monetary issues and even give best tutors and schools to their kids. Because of their hectic and monotonous work schedules, dis balanced work and personal life, they are not able to spend the "quality time" with their kids hence reducing the emotional bond with them. But yes, the money flows in which is helping their kids.
Have we not all heard of the increasing suicidal tendencies among teenagers? There have been so many instances where students have tried to end their lives merely because of the thought of getting flunk in the exam because he was not able to study properly keeping the thought of not getting paid on time at his work to pay his tuition fees. Is this fair to them? If anything else bothers them apart from studies, that leads to harmful health of theirs and they end up in trauma and depression. They are not able to concentrate on their studies leading to poor grades and low academic record.They lose self-confidence and get unmotivated.
So, it's about the time management when actually there is no "time" to do anything else than study. Contrary would have been fruitful if the education system was not that intensive and would have "pampered" their students and was a little more "westernized". By that claim is meant that varsities outside India focus on the knowledge and practical aspects of education and not on grades. Growing up a mugger is not their motto.
Fuel to the education system is money and that should be fueled by parents until their kids have a sustainable life of his own by giving his best at school and being an achiever then. Parents do give their kids their best in providing them the best school in town so why take the childhood/tenacity away just at the mere thought of being independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...getting all over place and has crept in a students to an extent that they need to think on...
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Line 1, column 510, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...er who we are and what place are we in. The education system is no different and no...
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Line 1, column 687, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...rents are leveling up and pay them more as they work so hard for getting a good an...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... and secured future of their children. The dependency of the students at home is o...
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Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
... to poor grades and low academic record.They lose self-confidence and get unmotivate...
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Line 6, column 5, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...lf-confidence and get unmotivated. So, its about the time management when actually...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, may, really, so, then, well, apart from, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 11.1786427146 313% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 28.8173652695 226% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 55.5748502994 162% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3048.0 2260.96107784 135% => OK
No of words: 639.0 441.139720559 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76995305164 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02776782673 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89958041721 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 204.123752495 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446009389671 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 936.9 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3937433592 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.888888889 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07407407407 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289483028838 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767548731832 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622177900771 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146312653622 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044462531667 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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