The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp.
"20 years ago, Dr.Field, conducted a study of Tertia and claimed from his observations that the children were reared by the entire village than by their own biological parents. However a new study that included interviews with children living in the islands show that they spend more time talking about their parents than other adults. This results in Dr.Kapr denoting that the study and observation of Dr. Field to be wrong.
"Observation is half the truth"
It has timed and tested over the years, the full truth can be brought forward by only analyzing all its sides. Observation merely beings up one side of a multi dimensional plane. In the argument, Dr. Field brought up his observation about the children of Tertia as the truth he perceived. According to him, the children were reared by the entire village rather than by their own parents.
Contrary to his research, a recent study in which, children were interviewed to get their perspective on cultures and tradition, proved to be other wise. The study showed that the children spent more time talking about their parents rather than other adults in the village. With this study, the author proposes that the study and research conducted by Dr.Field on the behavior of children as well as culture is not accurate.
This proposition obviously had a lot of assumptions and premises that needs to be answered.
On the part of Dr. Field, the main question that arises is how he came up with the conclusion. What was the sample size of children he had observed ? If the sample size was small, his conclusion will be most doubted upon as being partial to a small group. If the sample population size was big enough, was the population consisting of all the different ideologies that existed in the society? Was their representations proportional? If yes, then the strength of this argument depends upon the error rate and how he observed the error rate.
Apart from this, what was his mode of observation? Without proper interaction and just observation of actions can bring up alot of anomalies in interpretation. For example, The number six(6) if written on a paper, will be read differently by people standing opposite to each other as six(6) or nine(9). Thus proper communication medium is a must to bridge the gap in understanding. With this, he being a noted anthropologist, why did he only rely on the means of observation rather than conducting a proper 2 way assessment to gain the whole scenario? In the passage it seems he observed without proper interaction with the locals to gain their insights. This could seriously undermine his observation as his own version of truth.
On the other hand, for the recent study by Dr.Karp, the team interacted with the locals, gained their perspective and arrived at a different result. This could depend on a variety of factors. With the time difference between the 2 studies, did the attitude and outlook of the village and children change? If yes, then it would undermine the claim that Dr.Field's study and observations were false. Did the villagers change their attitude seeing outsiders and researchers? This could lead to falsified data being used for inferences and conclusions.
The results of Dr.Karp's study is based upon the statement that the children spent more time talking about their parents than about other adults.This could lead to the question about what the interactions are between the team and the villagers. What are the questions being asked? Are the questions being asked skewed to achieve a motivated purpose? Like the faces of a coin, is the study just focusing on modifying their favorable part of the story and leaving the rest out? This could seriously undermine the results of the study.
Adding to this, how did they come up to the conclusion from just the study that showed more talk about parents than other adults from the children. It could be that the children are close to other adults as well but do not have exciting stories with them to share.
With these assumptions and motivations, conclusion seems to be under doubt. But the passage surely would support a whole hearted conversation, interaction and observations to be joined together to piece up the entire puzzle of real truth.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 37 15
No. of Words: 647 350
No. of Characters: 3077 1500
No. of Different Words: 281 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.043 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.629 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.486 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.989 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.351 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.231 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.421 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: otherwise
...on cultures and tradition, proved to be other wise. The study showed that the children spe...
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Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field
... the study and research conducted by Dr.Field on the behavior of children as well as ...
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Line 7, column 297, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...pposite to each other as six6 or nine9. Thus proper communication medium is a must t...
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Line 7, column 335, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
.... Thus proper communication medium is a must to bridge the gap in understanding. With t...
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Line 7, column 390, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...the gap in understanding. With this, he being a noted anthropologist, why did he only...
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Line 9, column 47, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
... other hand, for the recent study by Dr.Karp, the team interacted with the locals, g...
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Line 9, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Fields
...en it would undermine the claim that Dr.Fields study and observations were false. Did ...
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Line 11, column 19, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karps
... and conclusions. The results of Dr.Karps study is based upon the statement that ...
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Line 11, column 145, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...t their parents than about other adults.This could lead to the question about what t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, then, thus, well, apart from, for example, talking about, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 55.5748502994 176% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3181.0 2260.96107784 141% => OK
No of words: 642.0 441.139720559 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95482866044 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78018476537 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 204.123752495 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448598130841 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 955.8 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 19.7664670659 182% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5791018412 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3611111111 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94444444444 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 10.0 5.15768463074 194% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.67664670659 364% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269463957136 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696578012564 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072868386933 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114095568202 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794066110465 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 98.500998004 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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