Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams like football while other people think that taking part in individual sports is better like tennis and swimming Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports is better like tennis and swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Enabling people to adjust their learning pace is the primary reason being a solo sport is advantageous. While some agree, I believe contributing to the team sport is a preferable option to improve collaborative skills.
A solo sport is favourable as one could adjust their learning pace, allowing them to be flexible when making progress. More specifically, they do not have to catch up with others’ progress or wait for those who are left behind. Thus, they are only responsible for their improvement. For instance, Nurul Akmal, one of the Olympic medalists for weightlifting from Indonesia, claimed to request more practice sessions with her coach before the match due to feeling a little bit anxious about the game. The coach approved that request immediately as Nurul was the only Indonesian weightlifting representative from Indonesia. However, going solo often makes athletes feel support deprived due to very few support systems.
In contrast, being in a team while playing sports improves one’s collaborative skills as one needs to strategize and cooperate while playing. This increases their sense of empathy towards one another as they are trained to understand each other’s personalities. For example, a study suggests that friendships formed by a soccer team last for more than 20 years on average, ten years longer than those formed in a swimming team. One of the reasons is that regularly collaborating in the field creates a deep bond between members, leading to a sense of belonging to the community. That is what makes a friendship coming from soccer likely last longer.

To conclude, although being involved in an individual sport allows ones to organize their own learning pace, being in a sports team increases their collaborative skills. If possible, both approaches should be combined as one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 465, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2602739726 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92197753441 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609589041096 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4392899721 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13961121332 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472520170618 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441668474217 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100277611052 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436808701494 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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