The consumption of products with high sugar content is considered as a cause for a numerous detrimental problems in health condition. The opinion that accelerating the price of sugar-sweetened food and beverages would atribute to the decreasing demand for sugar. From my perspective, i firmly disagree with this viewpoint due to its inefficience and i would like to put forward the alternative that is more plausible.
To commence with, pricy cost would not make people give up the habit of eating sugary food and drink. On the grounds that people are too much addicted to those sugar-rich products or a high price does not really curtail their abilities to buy such expensive goods.Therefore, no matter costly the sugar-packed products are, consumers would still purchase them and the illness related to sugar intake would still continue. This is not a efficient approach to adress the issue of high sugar consmption.
In lieu of making sugar-sweetened food and drink more over-priced, raising buyers' awareness about the perilous impacts of these products on their health would be more down-to-earth. Through social media, people now can update almost every up-to-date information, hence , it is beneficial to make use of social networks like facebook or instagram to widely spread the message of using less products containing high amount of sugar for a better physical condition . As a result, the more people acknowledge the advese effects of consuming too much sugar, the less they want to buy sugary items.
In conclusion, having to pay an exorbitant cost for food and drink with high sugar content would not lessen the tendency to consume sugar of custormers except for their actual desire to make a reduction in buying processed products packed with sugar.
- It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion What sort of punishment should parents and t 78
- Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree 61
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...d as a cause for a numerous detrimental problems in health condition. The opinion that a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s viewpoint due to its inefficience and i would like to put forward the alternati...
^
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...r abilities to buy such expensive goods.Therefore, no matter costly the sugar-packed prod...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ntake would still continue. This is not a efficient approach to adress the issue ...
^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'buyers'' or 'buyer's'?
Suggestion: buyers'; buyer's
...ood and drink more over-priced, raising buyers awareness about the perilous impacts of...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...most every up-to-date information, hence , it is beneficial to make use of social ...
^^
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun products is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...m to widely spread the message of using less products containing high amount of suga...
^^^^
Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...of sugar for a better physical condition . As a result, the more people acknowledg...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, really, so, still, therefore, except for, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9100481258 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585964912281 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7161000051 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.5 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349014645296 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146966931232 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055031385213 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224032286648 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328769948599 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...d as a cause for a numerous detrimental problems in health condition. The opinion that a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s viewpoint due to its inefficience and i would like to put forward the alternati...
^
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...r abilities to buy such expensive goods.Therefore, no matter costly the sugar-packed prod...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ntake would still continue. This is not a efficient approach to adress the issue ...
^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'buyers'' or 'buyer's'?
Suggestion: buyers'; buyer's
...ood and drink more over-priced, raising buyers awareness about the perilous impacts of...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...most every up-to-date information, hence , it is beneficial to make use of social ...
^^
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun products is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...m to widely spread the message of using less products containing high amount of suga...
^^^^
Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...of sugar for a better physical condition . As a result, the more people acknowledg...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, really, so, still, therefore, except for, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9100481258 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585964912281 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7161000051 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.5 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349014645296 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146966931232 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055031385213 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224032286648 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328769948599 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.