It is often argue that people should take risks in order to better their work and personal lives. While there are some disadvantages, I believe the benefits of taking risks outweigh the drawbacks.
On the one hand, there are several negative effects for taking risks. Firstly, risk taking may affect people’s health. This is because some field of works are often asking workers to sacrefice for their profession, which can affect their well-being in the long terms. For instance, coal miners have to expose their lungs to coal dust, which in turns can increase the chance of them having lungs problem in the future. Secondly, take risks too often can make people feel unsatisfy with their life, which means they will constanty compare their life with their peers. As a result, they might continuously risk taking eventhough they already achieved amazing results because they can not be satisfied with their life.
On the other hand, I would argue that the merits of risk taking dwarf the drawbacks. To begin with, people will be more fulfilled with their career choice. This can help people to confidently resign from jobs that might not excite them, and look for the professions that can fulfill them both financially and mentally. For example, in Vietnam, software developers are often switched their jobs every 2 years for better salary and work environment. Furthermore, risk taking can help people learn from their mistakes. Many famous people have taken risks with some have succeed on their first try while others have to go through trials and errors to get their results, and the one that fail have learned from their mistakes and improved their own products and invention. To illustrate, Gary Vee, who is an investor, had failed many businesses in the past, and now has became one of the most prolific investors after he had learned from his past business mistakes.
In conclusion, although risk taking can have several drawbacks, I believe that the benefits would outweigh the drawbacks.
- Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 78
- Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 67
- The chart below shows the results of a survey about people s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant 56
- Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home To what extent do you agree or disagree 56
- Some say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it Discuss both views and give your opinion 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 568, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
... people have taken risks with some have succeed on their first try while others have to...
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Line 3, column 866, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...any businesses in the past, and now has became one of the most prolific investors afte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03915662651 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37515040665 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3556456853 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5625 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.375 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360140286243 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145750484761 0.084324248473 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757758546074 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24907858518 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069823584545 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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