Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
An increasing number of youngsters chose to travel or find a temporary job instead of enrolling in the university straightly. From my perspective, albeit having potential benefits, the drawbacks of this option surpass the plus points.
On the one hand, taking a gap year in order to journey or to work can be advantageous by virtue of the factual knowledge that people can accumulate. This is because different from theoretical teaching methodology at college, students will be trained after encountering realistic circumstances at the workplace or while traveling, thereby acquiring more pragmatic skills which can apply for further research in any educational institution. This has been proved by Bill Gates, one of the most successful people thanks to experiencing the real world. He broaden his horizons by himself and started up successfully due to his wealth of practical familiarity with the economy. Likewise, youths will also have a better understanding after observing the world.
On the other hand, the decision of taking a year off to travel or to work can have adverse effect on the development of students. First and foremost, normally, fledglings who have not finished tertiary level education are still too green, immature, and gullible, moreover, there is no one standby to remind them to keep on track, no one to instruct and educate, as a result, the young generation can easily lose track of life owing to the alluring and thrilling world. With no qualification nor orientation, some students were tricked into illegal work. In a recent survey conducted by the New York Times, in the USA, there is a significant upward trend of young citizens who was lured into the path of crime during a gap year. In addition, it is often the case that students struggle to adapt to life at college or deal with academic thesis consequent to a long absence from school, this will directly affect their own future.
In conclusion, being an employee or traveler to enhance factual understanding prior to being a university student can be helpful, however, the merits of this phenomenon is overshadowed by the aforementioned disadvantages. Therefore, students had better complete their studies and lay a solid foundation before stepping into the outside world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'broadens'.
Suggestion: broadens
...anks to experiencing the real world. He broaden his horizons by himself and started up ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...l directly affect their own future. In conclusion, being an employee or travel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, likewise, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19073569482 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98626911641 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621253405995 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9002361157 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.071428571 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2142857143 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0785292369532 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272761284195 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029409517596 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0406454188227 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203843017776 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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