Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether young people should "follow their dreams" or choose less selfish, worthy goals.
Indisputably, I agree that it is important to keep one's goals realistic and relevant to society.
Nevertheless, we have seen people whose dreams were discredited at first, but turned out to make an impactful contribution in many people's lives. We are all diverse and we feel the need to express ourselves accordingly. And, as long as we excel in our work, other people will relate to it, making our job worthwhile.
Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that someone else's goals can be classified as "worthy" or "unworthy" of their time and effort and would argue that if a person considers that a certain objective is important to them, they should pursue it.
First of all, I dare say it would be impossible to get through life without having any joy in it. The human being needs to feel an important connection with what they do with the majority of their time, even if it is somewhat selfish at times.
I would like to point out that the many of those who we admire today had to have an introspective moment to work on their dreams. To illustrate, let us look at Steve Jobs' example: It is told that he would work on his projects for hours straight, leaving his family on second plan. In this circumstance, obviously we could argue that selfishenss is a relative concept. His family might have felt his absence at precious times, deeming him a workaholic, but would it not have been selfish of him not to share his computing gifts with Humanity? Consequently, it is pretty obvious that there is a price to be paid to carry out whatever mission your calling demands you to.
Furthermore, what is the basis of the author affirmation? Should we only attend to our immediate and bare necessities, we would slowly turn into emotionally-damaged people, oppressing our deepest desires. Specifically, we would not have known many of the inventions and creations we see nowadays, we would have sung to many songs that marked out trajectory... The examples are infinite.
Both common sense and personal experience have told us that no dream is a bad dream if it makes sense to their dreamer and those around them.
Hence, all the evidence above demonstrates that it is okay to idealise the future that you want for yourself and how you can directly impact not only those around you but billions of others through the Internet and other means of communication. There is no limit, really. So why should you limit yourself?
Admittedly, "following your heart's desire" will have consequences. This is true especially when it comes to affording your Education. Will you have enough money to keep up with your student debt if you decided to go for a career that will not provide quick financial return?
In addition, a person has only so much time to dream before they will have to pay their own bills and have grown-up responsibilities. After that, this person will have to accommodate their goals to their reality and that's sadly when many dreams die off. Worthy or not. Because of this, it is essential that this person can be as mature as possible about their decisions from an early age.
In conclusion, although many people will follow inherently egotistical ambitions. John Lennon sang (and we still sing it to this day): "You may say I'm a dreamer but I'm not the only one." As long as there are those who dream big and work hard to achieve it, many others will benefit from it.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 52, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...y, I agree that it is important to keep ones goals realistic and relevant to society...
^^^^
Line 18, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...modate their goals to their reality and thats sadly when many dreams die off. Worthy ...
^^^^^
Line 20, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... sing it to this day: 'You may say Im a dreamer but Im not the only one.&apos...
^^
Line 20, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...day: 'You may say Im a dreamer but Im not the only one.' As long as ther...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 101.0 33.0505617978 306% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2979.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 612.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86764705882 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97379470361 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88796222901 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 326.0 215.323595506 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532679738562 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 911.7 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7612750868 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.97078651685 241% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18428107689 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511152896508 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466444800688 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807399347282 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409846147534 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 52, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...y, I agree that it is important to keep ones goals realistic and relevant to society...
^^^^
Line 18, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...modate their goals to their reality and thats sadly when many dreams die off. Worthy ...
^^^^^
Line 20, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... sing it to this day: 'You may say Im a dreamer but Im not the only one.&apos...
^^
Line 20, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...day: 'You may say Im a dreamer but Im not the only one.' As long as ther...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 101.0 33.0505617978 306% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2979.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 612.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86764705882 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97379470361 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88796222901 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 326.0 215.323595506 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532679738562 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 911.7 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7612750868 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.97078651685 241% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18428107689 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511152896508 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466444800688 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807399347282 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409846147534 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.