Understanding how to manage money is a skill that should be learned early in life. By learning and adopting healthy spending and saving habits, people naturally have a much smoother transition into the piling responsibilities that adulthood brings. Those who are sheltered and babied by their parents from early childhood and into their teenage years will certainly have a much harder time getting accustomed to the sudden increase of responsibilities and are more prone to feel overwhelmed and stressed about having to deal with bills, taxes, and debt.
Even though learning the value of money and how to handle it is important, there is a fine line between teaching how money works in the society we live and how it affects our lives and those around us and teaching children that money is the only way people know how to define social success. The ultimate goal is to ease children into the transition of becoming adults and handling their lives and budgets and not to instil toxic behaviours and thoughts that would link their self esteem to material goods.
The way the value and proper handling of money is taught should be through a perspective of personal growth and practical use and not through the lense of surpassing the people around you. The superficial and materialistic way of seeing money actually promotes erratic spending and loss of control because this person has been taught that social success is linked to having more expensive material things. A person who believes this won’t truly understand the value of money, they only understand the importance of showing others they are more successful. This is why is makes no sense to teach children that the value of money is linked to social success.
Children who learn about the value of money in a way that promotes personal growth and control, will naturally become curious about personal financing and budgeting, which is where the real benefits come in. Once these children reach early adulthood with a skill set and habit of keeping track of expenses and income, they will not only avoid a rocky transition into adulthood but they will have the opportunity to further their financial knowledge and propel towards a future where money is not a constant worry in their lives.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...and not through the lense of surpassing the people around you. The superficial and materialistic way ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...se of surpassing the people around you. The superficial and materialistic way of se...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98148148148 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55316225418 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8092892097 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.181818182 118.986275619 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3636363636 23.4991977007 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90909090909 5.21951772744 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21484042298 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841614377406 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403976079463 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121349372988 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399769138569 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...and not through the lense of surpassing the people around you. The superficial and materialistic way ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...se of surpassing the people around you. The superficial and materialistic way of se...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98148148148 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55316225418 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8092892097 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.181818182 118.986275619 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3636363636 23.4991977007 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90909090909 5.21951772744 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21484042298 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841614377406 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403976079463 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121349372988 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399769138569 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.