New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages

Thanks to technological advances, children can spend their free time in myriad ways. I consent to the notion that the disadvantages of new technologies outweigh the advantages.
On the one hand, advanced technologies exert beneficial effects on children. First and foremost, youngsters can gain access to a massive variety of educational content. They can watch these contents on all devices that have internet and everywhere. For instance, on Youtube, there are numerous videos that not only have abundant useful knowledge but also are fascinating for children to learn. Secondly, children can expand their relationships. On social apps such as Facebook, and Zalo, there are multiple study groups in which children can take part so that they can talk together, make friends, and get learning, and social experiences from each other.
On the other hand, cutting-edge technologies bring about detrimental implications for children. First, they badly affect physical health. Spending most of the time staring at the monitor leads to the rise in obesity due to the sedentary lifestyle and lack of exercise. Second, children can have access to content placing them in danger. Adults cannot always observe the contents children watch, read or play. The incidents of suicide and self-injury due to Blue Whale or Momo challenges are classic examples of this problem.
In conclusion, although technologies have positive benefits, I am firmly convinced that they have more demerits than merits.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1260.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 231.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45454545455 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8756842952 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.662337662338 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8572582971 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276645353382 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908287638258 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829355937049 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193714021459 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128847592028 0.056905535591 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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