CLAIM Young people s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills REASON These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than ful | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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CLAIM Young people s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills REASON These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than ful

The advent of portable devices like mobile phones and tablets and their wide availability especially among the young generation (people, decades before, couldn’t even have imagined in their most bizarre dreams) has hindered the development of the true social lives of these young people. I mostly agree with the reason that has been mentioned that these devices encourage users to build ersatz social status which travels them through fake relationships that they make online, however, some benefits can’t be ignored that have also helped people to enhance their personalities. You know what, the case is that there are good users and also misusers of everything and the impact these gadgets can have on lives is highly dependent on how and by whom they are used.
Firstly, today it can be seen that children from a very young age have phones in their hands. Their minds are highly mutable at this age; whatever they see or listen they try to copy or imitate it, though insensibly. As it is a ‘can’t doubt’ truth that people’s social media lives and real lives are poles apart, to be honest, so whatever’s fed to children’s minds through social media, they believe it to be the case and either want to be like those people or compete with them. They try to fit in others' circles and want to make themselves up according to others' standards. In all this drama, the one thing that young people forget is that they have a social life around them; they are immensely submerged into building something that is not real and eventually would fall apart and that thing is their fake personality. They should go out instead, interact with some real people, not some anonymous users, and make friends. This is how one would be able to come out of their comfort zone and find a good social life.
Further, the stark ignorance of the fact that temporary connections through disguised personalities can result in complete disconnection from people who know exactly how and what one is. There’s one advertisement in which it shows that how the over-indulgence in these gadgets affects the invaluable relationships with people around us. A mother asks her son to install social media applications into her old phone so that her son, by doing so, would now talk to her also like he does with his online friends all the time, and by this method, there would be a little conversation between them, finally. It propounds a very deep message that how much our social relations are getting hurt. People are sitting at the dining table, having dinner with their families, and the environment is pin-drop silent, the reason being everyone’s on their phones; they are close but not together. It is said that verbal conversation and gestures portray one’s true self, and it can never be compared with the new feature of emojis that is widely used now because people can fake it there too. Hence, it is very much required to invest in valuing the relationships that one has now and spend more time with loved ones, who accept their true selves and yet never complain for not being what they, falsely, purport to be on the internet.
While there are multitudes of comments that support the claim and the reason mentioned above, there are also facts which completely oppose them. These gadgets have not only hampered the development of social skills but have also served in building many too. Through these devices, for instance, people can learn how to develop their personalities using numerous courses, waking up in the morning and getting motivated for the whole day by motivational speeches through different websites, undoubtedly, the abridged distance between people through the use of video conferencing and many more. People, now, can connect to more natives all around the world, talk and chat with them, and learn about their culture without having to spend on the expenses of travel for the experience and knowledge they can get through these gadgets. Some matrimonial sites have also come out to be a life-changing medium for many, same with other applications too. By engaging in these devices people are making their circles vast. These are the various examples of how these gadgets have improved people’s social lives as well and have proved to be a boon to them.
To sum up, although portable technology has good consequences in constructing one’s demeanour in some ways, however, the extensive usage of these portable devices means spending most of the time of the day on the phone equals less time available to interact with people around oneself in real life. Moreover, spending more time on phones means engaging with unnecessary content and trying to incorporate those things into real life and hence, deviating from what a person’s true nature is.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, you know, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 14.8657303371 229% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 90.0 33.0505617978 272% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 113.0 58.6224719101 193% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3972.0 2235.4752809 178% => OK
No of words: 803.0 442.535393258 181% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94645080946 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.32327480322 4.55969084622 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53874138221 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 371.0 215.323595506 172% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46201743462 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1232.1 704.065955056 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.5596830697 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.769230769 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8846153846 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
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Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229140609042 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714673206016 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600639491558 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142397625123 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630613874961 0.0667264976115 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 178.0 100.480337079 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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