A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college

I would moderately agree with this statement. Both mindsets have advantages and disadvantages, but I believe that cooperation outweighs competition for many reasons. The first is that cooperation is a more effective way of accomplishing goals and achieving outcomes. The saying two heads are better than one rings true in many situations. Cooperation means nobody is actively looking for an edge over anyone. Everyone is instead focused on the task at hand, making sure it is the best it can be.
Another reason cooperation trumps competition is the supposed outcome of any given project or task. Competition is the main motivator for completion, leading to poor workmanship and misguided focus. People could be so focused on outdoing one another that what they're attempting to complete can fall by the wayside. Cooperation instills a sense of communal pride instead of self-gratifying appeasement of one's ego. For example, imagine that construction workers try to one-up each other instead of working in unison by seeing who can complete their section the fastest. In those circumstances, the building may not be completed properly and can be a major hazard to those who will eventually occupy it.
Many jobs require cooperation to function efficiently. Governments are not run by people constantly trying to outdo each other in their departments. They work together in harmony and each position fulfills a role that makes another role able to complete what they need to accomplish. Teaching young people that competition is the way to succeed eliminates personal passion and self-esteem. Not everybody has the same physically, mental, or emotional capacity. That can make it difficult for some people to compete with others who may have an advantage over them. In fact, some people may not even have the desire to compete. Many people find constant competitiveness exhausting and would rather be a part of an uplifting and collaborative environment. I want to go into forensic psychiatry and part of the job description is working in a team with other professionals. In order to treat patients effectively, I need to cooperate and listen to the input of my colleagues. Everyone has a different outlook and sometimes a variety of different views can provide needed clarity in a situation. To conclude, I strongly believe that a cooperative mindset is far healthier and uplifting than instilling a fierce need to prove who is the best.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, still, for example, in fact, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18781725888 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09066198443 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571065989848 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8895390584 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.1666666667 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0267895051433 0.243740707755 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00820470594792 0.0831039109588 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0190050352051 0.0758088955206 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0158805305184 0.150359130593 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150393250771 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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