The lecturer casts doubts on the article that states Spartacus was one of the most appealing hero in history. She believes the supporting points made in the reading passage do not rely on accurate historical stories.
First, returning home was not the only goal when Spartacus led his slavery men to fight the Roman oppressors. In fact, in their first battle, Spartacus' army actually defeated the Romans and could have taken that opportunity to get back to their homelands. However, since Spartacus did not only seek to return home, but also wanted to revenge the Romans and gain wealth by taking their properties, they did not seize the chance and started to march around the city for those two different purposes. These were clearly over appreciated goals.
Second, the speaker rebuts the argue that Spartacus was a genius military leader. She points out that the only reason why his army managed to defeat Roman army in their first battle was because the Romans had taken them lightly and thus, only sent a weak unit of army to fight against them. On the other hand, when the Romans sent their highly trained and equipped soldiers to the battlefield, Spartacus' team could barely win. This indicates Spartacus was not such a brilliant leader as believed by the author.
Third, the story of how Spartacus rejected the offer from a Roman general in order to free Roman slaves was not based on historical evidence. The fact is when anti-slavery movement started to develop in Europe in 18th century, its writers and thinkers needed an ancient hero to act as an inspiration. Then, the character of Spartacus was chosen and role-played as a hero who liberated all slaves oppressed in Roman. Therefore, the claim that Spartacus was an anti-slavery advocate started from nothing rather than an inspirational story in a play.
In conclusion, the lecturer and the writer hold conflicting views on whether Spartacus deserved to be praised as a legendary hero in the history.
- TOEFL T P O 5 Integrated Writing Task 52
- TPO 50 Independent Writing Task all university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 76
- TPO 09 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO 44 Integrated Writing Task 80
- tpo 15 the spread of the cane toads in Australia 80
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ed goals. Second, the speaker rebuts the argue that Spartacus was a genius military le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 331.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97885196375 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56009453463 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574018126888 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5070053314 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.866666667 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.509576166044 0.272083759551 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16434464474 0.0996497079465 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102684810948 0.0662205650399 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246430188337 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10949554751 0.0443174109184 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ed goals. Second, the speaker rebuts the argue that Spartacus was a genius military le...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 331.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97885196375 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56009453463 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574018126888 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5070053314 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.866666667 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.509576166044 0.272083759551 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16434464474 0.0996497079465 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102684810948 0.0662205650399 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246430188337 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10949554751 0.0443174109184 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.