As it is becoming more and more popular phenomenon that some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.From technoogy to the economy development aspect, we should admit that it is the consequence of the rapid changing socity's reconstruction on families today. The human world has already developed to this level.When some children today can not live without smartphones, we should know that there are side effects on them. However, as we are living in this technology-led society, we should embrace the future as we accept radios as well as televisions. Thus, as my concern, children spend hours on smartphones is a more positive development. I will elaborate my views as follows.
To begin with, every generation of people have their own living back ground. We have also been through a world without computers. When I was young, the computers just showed up in every familiy in my country. At that time, there was also anohter topic said, some children spend hours every day on their computers. What an interesting world!We as children were doubted that we played too much time on computer games. Honestly speaking, I played a lot but most of the time were allowed by my parents since my assigments were submitted.Nowadays especially after the outbreak of COVID-19, all the chilren in my country had to take online classes due to the great pandemics. At this time, few people doubted that children took much time on computers, becuase they have to. As time goes on, the computer is changed to smartphone, but the debate continues. Admittedly, the computers were used to play games most when I was young. I should say that my great interest on coding was established at that time,that invoked my passion on computer science.
Every coin has two sides, now the smartphones are on the stage, some children can not control themselves and always took their smartphones in their little hands. For one thing we should know the reason why they want to take so much time on it: for games, cartoons as well as socializing needs since their friends may also using smartphones on the other side of the screen. So can they drop the phones and sit in front of the computers? Maybe, but the smartphones are more covinient,for example, some children's hands may be too small to type on kerboards. So this is our world now, we should learn some lessons from the computer age. If we force to limit the time of the children to use smartphones, they may lose interests and couriosities like we did when we sat in front of computers. The world is developing faster and faster by the technology, we should not set so many limits on our children since the next Steve Jobs, the next Elon Musk will come from them.
At last, people may question that there are negative effects like the children's eyesight will get damaged by too much time on using smartphones. I should get back my point that the new screen technology is on the way out to labs to the customers which do little harm to human's eyes. That is to say, what we are concering right now may be litte piece of cake in the future.
To conclude, although there are negative dvelopments that some children spend hours every day on their smart phones , we should not hold the wheels of history, the positve effects of that will win at last.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, honestly, however, if, may, so, thus, well, for example, as well as, for one thing, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 24.0651302605 283% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2719.0 1615.20841683 168% => OK
No of words: 573.0 315.596192385 182% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74520069808 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.20363070211 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6740503189 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 176.041082164 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474694589878 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.9 506.74238477 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0231250438 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.576923077 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0384615385 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254142822209 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747172725809 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809636757604 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160875397609 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760924491105 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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