There is a very famous saying that has been passed down from generations to generations: Jack of all trades is the master of none. So many generations have passed, yet I feel that the value of this saying still remains relevant. Although it appears the more the better, I strongly believe one should focus on pursuing one specialized major in order to achieve the best in life.
First of all, although it sounds amazing to be a human encyclopedia who has a bit of knowledge of everything, the journey of becoming one may lead the generalists to undesirable destinations. This is because knowing only basic knowledge of a subject don't seem to be of much help in reality when everyone has to make a living. Our society is more in need of specialists and experts who understand their field deeply and can process their job in an effective manner. This is also the reason why all universities and colleges are constituted of different schools and departments. Their primary goal is to prepare students for their future career as well as to provide society with an academically well-equipped workforce. Even if there was a school of general knowledge, there is no guarantee its graduates will be valued in the real life, leading them to little job opportunities.
Similar to how it is described in the saying, trying to gain a broad knowledge by pursuing many different academic schools equals missing the possibility to be a specialist in one field. This becomes a disadvantage, especially when it comes to finding a purpose and having a direction in academic journey. For example, a student majoring in pedagogy knows her focus is on excelling all pedagogical approaches and continuously doing research on the subject to gain better grasp of it. On the contrary, a student choosing to study general knowledge has no other goal but to touch on other fields they haven’t discovered. The main different between the two is that the first one can see the destination of their journey while the other can not. Although having general knowledge on everything is not a negative thing, the lack of a clear path while pursuing it can be a problem.
In conclusion, since the two statements inevitably exclude each other, it makes the best choice to focus and master one certain academic subjects, considering the ambiguous future of being a generalist.
- A Historical Person You Admire 41
- TOEFL T P O 5 Integrated Writing Task 52
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject 80
- TPO 44 Integrated Writing Task 80
- TOEFL T P O 4 Integrated Writing Task 35
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...owing only basic knowledge of a subject dont seem to be of much help in reality when...
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Line 3, column 442, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective manner" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... field deeply and can process their job in an effective manner. This is also the reason why all univer...
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'broad knowledge'.
Suggestion: broad knowledge
...described in the saying, trying to gain a broad knowledge by pursuing many different academic sch...
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Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...g to gain a broad knowledge by pursuing many different academic schools equals missing the pos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91939546599 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91315241477 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556675062972 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.210175881 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 122.0625 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8125 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190520105851 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550010533239 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428990887947 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106825219033 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406743350724 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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