The speaker here addresses the problem of unemployment which was caused as result of a Computech company and proposes a solution to the city council inorder to attract an automobile giant to build a manufacturing plant in the Hillview land. However, the solution proposed has many flaws which are listed below.
Firstly, the speaker states that the unemployment was created as a result of Computech computer software programming company abandoning its national facility last year. Thus, it can be assumed that this company employed majority of computer software developers which are now unemployed, and the speaker is asking the city council to attract an automobile manufacturing plant which will largely employ mechanical and automobile engineers. A car manufacturing plant will not be able to employ thousands of computer science engineer in its plant. Thus the solution suggested by speaker doesn't addresses the problem of unemployment efficiently.
Secondary, it is mentioned about encouraging the Autotech company to establish its plant in the Hillview area but it is not mentioned whenther the manufacturing company will hire the unemployed residents or not. There is a possibility that the manufacturing company will have its own workforce already present from the other manufacturing plants, and it is not planning to hire any employees. In such situation, establishing a plant and offering significant tax incentives to make the town attractive will not serve its purpose. Also the reason behind Computech computer software programming company abandoning its national facility last year is not known. It is highly possible that the company was not performing well and it's employees were not efficient enough. Thus training the unemployed residents might help alleviate the employment problem.
Finally, the hillview landfill is been underdeveloped for the decades. There is the possibility that this land is not suitable for any industry or manufacturing plant, hence no company has utilized this land till now. Otherwise, this landfill would've been used for some commercial or residential purposes earlier itself.
Thus, to alleviate the employment the solution suggested by speaker have some major flaws from assuming that the company will establish its manufacturing plant in the land untilized from decades to expecting that an automobile company will hire computer science engineers.
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- Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society especially among children Others believe that children s peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children s behavior
- In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area The Hillview landfill which has been undeveloped for decades is a perfect site for the plant The buildi 78
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 368 350
No. of Characters: 2005 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.448 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.98 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.812 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.434 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...d has many flaws which are listed below.Firstly, the speaker states that the unemployme...
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Line 1, column 855, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...computer science engineer in its plant. Thus the solution suggested by speaker doesn...
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Line 1, column 894, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... Thus the solution suggested by speaker doesnt addresses the problem of unemployment e...
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Line 1, column 951, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondary
...the problem of unemployment efficiently.Secondary, it is mentioned about encouraging the ...
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Line 1, column 1479, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...n attractive will not serve its purpose.Also the reason behind Computech computer so...
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Line 1, column 1479, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...n attractive will not serve its purpose.Also the reason behind Computech computer so...
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Line 1, column 1798, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
...t help alleviate the employment problem.Finally, the hillview landfill is been underdev...
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Line 1, column 2041, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: would've
...land till now. Otherwise, this landfill wouldve been used for some commercial or reside...
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Line 1, column 2118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
... or residential purposes earlier itself.Thus, to alleviate the employment the soluti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, so, thus, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62049861496 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23459841374 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459833795014 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.7135694852 57.8364921388 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.454545455 119.503703932 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8181818182 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266416916196 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119210666842 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573468216729 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266416916196 0.128457276422 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 14.3799401198 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.08 48.3550499002 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.91 12.5979740519 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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