Write a letter to a Tafe College applying to enrol in a course next semester. You should state the course you wish to enrol in. you should mention why you wish to enrol and what qualifications you already have.
Dear Peter,
I am intending to write this letter, as I want to enrol for the course of diploma in child care for the upcoming semester in your college.
Actually, I finished my Bachelor and Masters degree in child development and family relations from Bangladesh. And, from the last two years I am working in a childcare as a casual staff. To be a permanent staff I need relevant degree from Australia, moreover, to apply in a co-ordinator post with experience I need academic record from here. That is the reason that, I am planning to study the post graduate diploma in child care.
Furthermore, one vital thing I also believe that every country have their own style so working in Australia up to the bench mark, I should learn their policy, procedure and technique to educate the children. Though, I have academic degree, as well, 2 years experience from here it will be wise to be well prepared by enrolling for next session, meanwhile, this summer might be I can utilize properly by studying at home as it is hard to work outside in the hot summer.
In conclusion, by studying child care I might be eligible for the position of co-ordinator. So it will be best for me if you accept to give me the COE for the next semester. I am waiting to hear form you.
sincerely yours,
Jahura
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Sentence: Though, I have academic degree, as well, 2 years experience from here it will be wise to be well prepared by enrolling for next session, meanwhile, this summer might be I can utilize properly by studying at home as it is hard to work outside in the hot summer.
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