There are many people who believe that children should be taught the history of the place where they are living rather than the history of the globe. From my perspective, I partly agree with this statement for the reasons below.
On the one hand, local history plays a vital role in every country’s education system as it helps students to sow the seed of a sense of patriotism and national pride. Nowadays, although French colonization and America invasion period are included in every history book, the density and seamlessness of the lesson seem to be decreased because students are compulsory to take lessons of global history such as the Ice Age period, art, and political status of the Medieval period. Generally, this will make students more ignorant of their local history and cannot stimulate them to study hard and contribute to the country. For instance, in Vietnam, according to a recent survey, more than 49 percent of the twelve grader’s graduation history test result did not reach the average mark; however, turning to the history of other countries such as China or Japan, those graders can perpetually tell both real and fan-fictional facts. Those are nothing but disgrace to the sacred efforts made by forefathers.
On the other hand, global history is of great importance as students can gain knowledge and experience from it. In western countries, there is an undeniable fact that many famous businessmen apply historical lesson into operating their business; some of them believe that ignoring history either local or global can hinder them on their career path. For instance, almost every business person may once have read “36 military strategies and tactics” by Sun Tzu because it has been proved that those lessons given by this man can be applied into the economic section. Even the Westerners learn from an ancient strategist from China so there is no point in not learning about other countries as well as global history.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government should bring balance and place more emphasis on both local and global history. This is because not only children can become more patriotic but also, they can reap experience and lessons in order to work and study in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04032258065 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54574718079 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569892473118 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.7669446987 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.230769231 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233315399479 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794993170156 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445356408012 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137027173654 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510228228179 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04032258065 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54574718079 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569892473118 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.7669446987 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.230769231 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233315399479 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794993170156 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445356408012 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137027173654 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510228228179 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.