The speech suggests that the cirriculum should prioritize computer programming because high-paying programming jobs will be in abundance in the future and will lead to a fulfilling life. The evidence presented is the future will be dominated by technology, software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries, and programming will still benefit students who pursue other careers. I will discuss the flaws within this argument, discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument, and explain how the evidence would strenghen or weaken the argument.
To begin with, the first assumption made is that the future will be dominated by technology and this weakens the argument. While technology is on the rise and improving daily, we don't have any specific evidence to determine if this is true. Since Artificial Intelligence(A.I.) is developing quickly, many people will enter jobs that cannot be replaced by A.I. in the near future. Although computer programming jobs are high-paying at the moment, we don't know what the future holds for these types of professions.
In addition, the argument is further weakened with the second assumption made that software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. While these careers do offer lucrative pay, there are many other careers in the medical field that have even better job prospects and salaries. Also, If A.I. continues to advance, jobs in software engineering and data analysts may cease to exist. A.I. is already capable of performing all of the math required to perform the neccessary job tasks.
Furthermore, the author states that the students will be able to get high paying jobs and 'lead fulfilling lives'. To say that it will lead to a fulfilling life is a vague statement and more specific evidence is needed. Just because someone has a job that pays well doesn't mean that they are passionate about it. Take for instance a software engineer that makes six figures, yet hates the job. This is important because making lots of money doesn't equate to happiness.
In conclusion, there are many holes in this argument and in order to strengthen it, we need more specific examples. If the author could explain how the future will be dominated by technology and how these jobs are fulfilling it would strengthen the argument.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 50 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1922 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.966 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.688 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... is on the rise and improving daily, we dont have any specific evidence to determine...
^^^^
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... evidence to determine if this is true. Since Artificial IntelligenceA.I. is developi...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...is true. Since Artificial IntelligenceA.I. is developing quickly, many people wil...
^
Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... jobs are high-paying at the moment, we dont know what the future holds for these ty...
^^^^
Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'bettered', 'welled'.
Suggestion: bettered; welled
...ers in the medical field that have even better job prospects and salaries. Also, If A....
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 450, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
.... A.I. is already capable of performing all of the math required to perform the neccessary...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 265, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ecause someone has a job that pays well doesnt mean that they are passionate about it....
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 440, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... important because making lots of money doesnt equate to happiness. In conclusion, ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, still, then, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14882506527 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73484953885 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488250652742 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7454518559 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.555555556 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193540918321 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682294972276 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610776524632 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119072714693 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640273441769 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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