Why Do People Feel Isolated from Each Other and what are the solutions?
Effects of modern life creates so many problems, one of them that more people suffer isolation from society .
Today, in big cities such as Tokyo or Moscow people feel far away from others. And people knows that main problem is high amount of population in these cities. Because populated area often create crowded places , traffic conjunctions , less spaces for living , high rate of expenses and less work opportunities. And in these situation people feel more pressure. Persons do not pay much attention with whom they surrounded, they just think about their problems, mostly people are thinking about their work and how to get money. As result they spent more time for work, and less time for leisure. The pollution and bad facilities in cities create isolated life style at home, where people just coach potato.
Even so , government should have some activities and solutions for these problems . Some social professors believe that if government change politics for developing special areas of country it would create better lifestyle for community . Moreover, government should keep better work opportunities for citizens , also decrease amount of working hours , which can be used for improve social and mental stability of peoples . One of traditional way of improving lifestyle of people is create conditions for playgrounds in community houses, basketball or football stadiums and parks.
In general , I would suggest that having more time and space for people can make better social stability in society. In addition to that, government should care more about citizens by encourage facilities and opportunities for work and leisure time that can challenge people in mental stability .
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