Some people think that leaders should be old people, other believe young people should hold important positions in organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion
These days, a school of thought holds that elderly people should hold higher positions while others claim that younger coworkers can take it better in companies. Both viewpoints are justifiable, but I lean towards the former.
On the one hand, it is understandable why leaders should be old people. Firstly, most of elders have been working for years. They were through many difficult cases so that they have much more valuable work experience. This is the reason why older employees are capable of planning and defining the all-embracing duty and concrete jobs which could bring lucrative profits to their firms. Secondly, the elders may have more trusted and appreciated by other coworkers so that they may have stronger voices in the company which empower them to guide other colleagues. For example, Donald Trump, the 45th president of the US. He had been working in may organizations before becoming president. He had to accumulate experience from every events that he joined. With his unremitting efforts, he won the election.
On the other hand, younger coworkers could take essential parts in their corporation. To begin with, the youngers may have better physical and mental health so that they can suffer work-related stress. Furthermore, nowadays, young individuals could exposure to many social networking which may help them to have more creativity and innovation. They would succeed in productive projects and benefits the whole teams in the organization.
In conclusion, while there may be some reasons to support leaders who is the young colleagues, I am of the opinion that it is better for companies to let the elders hold higher positions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 142, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...laim that younger coworkers can take it better in companies. Both viewpoints are justi...
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Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the elders') or simply say ''most elders''.
Suggestion: most of the elders; most elders
... leaders should be old people. Firstly, most of elders have been working for years. They were ...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun networking seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much social networking', 'a good deal of social networking'.
Suggestion: much social networking; a good deal of social networking
...ys, young individuals could exposure to many social networking which may help them to have more creati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22388059701 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77609934193 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611940298507 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8574967321 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150334211859 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436797540481 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688357919448 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110032711122 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747467650403 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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