Technology development has enriched and facilitated our everyday life with hundreds of applications, thus offering plenty of job opportunities to menial workers
“from superficial look, such jobs substantially satify social demands, but they, in fact, retard both economic and cultural development”
Are you in support or in opposition to this idea
There has been an increase number of money-making opportunities created by online platforms for blue-collar workers. A school of thought holds that these jobs are seen to meet with social expectations when thinking in the abstract, however, they in reality hold back economy and culture thrive. I personally hold the notion that these jobs have a beneficial bearing to the social development and economic booming
To begin with, jobs offered from technological applications bring menial workers a source of income. As state-of-the-art applications are integrated with online retailing, it can be used by many people, in particular manual works to make a living. Not only does this improve people’s quality of life but it also aid in boosting the national GDP. To be precise, there reported to be more and more grabbers doing their jobs in daylight and allocating time to do livestreams on social platforms such as Facebook, Tiktok to sell goods. This way of working have supported them considerably in affording better living standards, especially those who dwell in metropolitan cities
Secondly, the fact that hand laborers acquiring jobs from social platform may promote knowledge sharing from all walks of life. A lot of local food cuisine videos shared by countryside people emerging from social media ignite people’s interest in doing research about regional traditions and customs. This thus helps major and minor communities to intermingle and encourage communal spirit. To illustrate, An Den, a tiktoker who is specialized in making videos about specialities in her hometown-Dak Lak receives millions of followers because of creative content about countryside life. A large number of fans show excitement to discover more about local food and fruits in each short video. Consequently, technological advances has a role to play in cultural development through facilitating menial jobs
In conclusion, I am side with the idea that technological applications are doing a great job as tool for menial workers to earn a living and help to promote intercultural understanding
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, in particular, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40490797546 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09701734398 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634969325153 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.1625539808 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.833333333 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273378650976 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841121599662 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887707916721 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154665724571 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143768890101 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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