It is definitely agreeable that one should work with the feeling of collaboration and not rivalry as it time gets wasted in having unnecessary fights or the cold wars. There can be a healthy competition which doesnot lead to any kind of rivalry, as it gives a different kind of energy of competing or winning.
Rivalry cannot lead t any kind of success but unnecessarily causes various problems in the life. Due to rivarly sometimes people may get violent unnecessarily and may harm the rivals. The rivalry can lead to major fights which may destroy many people's life. In Mahabharata due to rivalry between Kavravas and Pandavas, many innocent people died. Lord Krishna many times tried to bring peace, but failed to do so. If kavravas would have collaborated with Pandavas, Mahabharata would have not had happened. So it is necessary to work with feeling of collaboration.
Besides sometimes it is also necessary of having a healthy competition to achieve success. It is necessary to boost the energy. As it is often observed that life is driven by either fear or pleasure. The feeling of gaining pleasure, name, fame drives oneself to wrk hard, and if there is healthy competition it necessarily adds to it.
Although competition is needed, there is no need to have rivalry. Any success, or the authority in government, industry can be achieved by taking the advices of the elders or experienced people in that particular field. There is necessity to work in collaboration with others and move ahead with everyone, togetherly. Besides other people's point of view is understood to make the necessary changes and it may be more beneficial. So rather than having fights or indulge in unnecessary problems it it will be better to work togher.
Hence it is necessary to have healthy competition but rivarly is not necessary. The success can definitely achieved with the help of feeling of collaboration, heading towards success togetherly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had collaborated'?
Suggestion: had collaborated
...peace, but failed to do so. If kavravas would have collaborated with Pandavas, Mahabharata would have n...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: it
...ghts or indulge in unnecessary problems it it will be better to work togher. Hence...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...it it will be better to work togher. Hence it is necessary to have healthy competi...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'achieve'
Suggestion: achieve
...t necessary. The success can definitely achieved with the help of feeling of collaborati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, may, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 322.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05279503106 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92185855853 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490683229814 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3732528486 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.35 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0824773735578 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248761104464 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276205021272 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048741594107 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272446724371 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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