The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
The usage of cell phone has the negative impacts to the society just as smoking does, therefore it should not be permitted in certain areas. However, I do not totally agree with this opinion.
Mobile phone has numerous advantage. To begin with, having a phone allow individuals to communicate with friends, relatives or keep up-to-date with news. Moreover, with the small screen and its convenience, it can be easily brings by side everywhere and takes picture. People could also do quick email check and make questionnaires for the market research. As a result, devices like phone play an important role in our life, becoming a necessity good for not only for the teenager but also adults and middle age.
On the other hand, it is believed that using phone can result in the addiction just like the effect of cigarette. Therefore, it should be banned like smoking. In the modern’s world, due to the easy accessible of phone, it has brought negative influences to the teenager as they become more dependent on the social media, living in their virtual life that make them forgot to make interaction with people surround, isolate themselves from the outside world. Additionally, phones can act as a distraction to the students, disturbing the learning process with floating notifications. As a result, some parents make an agreement on limit their children’s screen time. The ban of phone could be a measure to reduce addiction from phone as well as improve people’s eyesight.
To conclude, despite its certain limitations, I still believe that we should not banned this electronic device as phone is needed in the daily life and it also tackles the works more quickly compared to other kinds of device. Thus, the ban of phone might lead to the negative development for a country as not all people are going to follow the rules. Moreover, phone doesn’t bring much bad impacts compared to smoking. In my personal perspective, taking other measures to reduce the addiction could be more effective such as reduce the usage time or engage more outdoor activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'ban'
Suggestion: ban
...ons, I still believe that we should not banned this electronic device as phone is need...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01739130435 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70795695606 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9356835132 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.823529412 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2941176471 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229465604757 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812744580471 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602267000849 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144735321535 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275039004985 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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