nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV shows,advertisement,fashion and follow the same brand.to what extend the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV shows,advertisement,fashion and follow the same brand.to what extend the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

A advertisement is one which sells the product without drawing attention to itself.Presently,some proportion of people asserts that,by adornment differences between nations are less evident.By contrast others have conflicting views.Here I would like to accord with given statement.

One school of thought believes that,human lifestyles has pampered in the lap of technology,which make life very convenient.For instance,the prevalence of adornment is gaining round radically,where people of different nations watch the same advertisement,where they get same news and product.Hence,people from various countries becoming less evident by viewing same shows.In addition,couple of television shows are telecast on television channel where people enjoy with their kith and kins and also try to do some fun frolic activities while watching reality shows.

Further emphasizing on my point of view,the owner of clothing brands hire the prominent celebrities who have ample of fans all over the world.For example nike brand is prevalence all over the world and company hired mr.Rahul dravid as a brand ambassador who is knows as tailor made for his batting .Hence,company earns back and belly by telecast such prominent personality on television.

Another school of thought believes that,by having busiest lifestyle people do not have enough time to for watching television.Moreover,plenty viewers changes the channel when the saw adornment on television.Hence,no avident is becoming fewer better between nations.

To recapitulate,A pen is mightier then a sword.people do not like to watch advertisement due to less time.However,adornments made life very convenient and the source of entertainment,

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human lifestyles has pampered in the lap of technology,which make life very convenient.
human lifestyles have pampered in the lap of technology, which makes life very convenient.

people from various countries becoming less evident
people from various countries are becoming less evident

nike brand is prevalence
nike brand is prevalent

plenty viewers changes the channel when the saw adornment
plenty viewers change the channels when they saw adornments

A pen is mightier then a sword
A pen is mightier than a sword

Sentence: ambassador who is knows as tailor made for his batting .Hence,company earns back and belly by telecast such prominent personality on television.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to is and knows
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to telecast and such

Sentence: Another school of thought believes that,by having busiest lifestyle people do not have enough time to for watching television.Moreover,plenty viewers changes the channel when the saw adornment on television.Hence,no avident is becoming fewer better between nations.
Error: avident Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 271 350
No. of Characters: 1408 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.196 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.512 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.881 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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