There is an undeniable fact that people have the right to pursue what they desire. Many students interested in other subjects in the university apart from mandatory ones. However, others suggest it is crucial to concentrate their time and effort on a specific degree. In my view, both ides persuaded me for some reasons.
On the one hand, students who care about the so called optional subjects are likely to be more well-rounded, which means they are not experts in a specific field but grasp a broad spectrum of knowledge of everything. For instance, university students interested in PE classes, English classes or some extracurriculum activities will aquire a perfect fitness as well as softskills such as being bilingual or time and financial management skills . Hence, they not only study their professions at the university but also possess a well-being state physically and mentally, which may caught employers' eyes.
On the other hand, the number of people who focus on a specific area of study has the highest percentage to be excellent workers in their interest field. Since their ultimate aim is to achieve a good qualification which proves they are experts at it, however, they are not specialists dealing with problems out of their reach . Hence, employers find they are perfect for a certain position in an organization. For example, many students nowadays spend all of their time on studying to achieve a desire degree and ended up acquire excellent professional skills and knowledge, however, they do not learn any softskills such as learn foreign language or social skills. As a result, their positions stay fixed for the rest of their careers because achieving softskills that make people different from others.
In conclusion, both approaches have pros and cons. Being average at everything maintains people to be more well-rounded, these people have a potential to become a good manager of CEO. Having said that, being an expert in an interest field makes people become an excellent workers. I strongly agree that both types of people maintain a well-balanced society and advance the civilization.
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Suggestion: .
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16279069767 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85354243011 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0504995816 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1875 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215807136222 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737546693149 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493569356169 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138354835171 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683121089523 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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