People in increasing number these days would say that young adult are more likely to make their decision easier than the previous generation. However, I disagree with them. I beleive that young people having difficulties to make their won decision. The basis for my views is based on the fact that yound individuals are more inluence with technology and social media.
In the past technology was limited. Factories were unable to produce massive production of different goods and products. People have no option except accepting the available goods. With limited option, people had no problems deciding witch goods they want to buy. In contrast, young people are puzzeled from the aboundant goods and products that became avialable due to techology advancement. Given that there are different car companies produce different cars style with a compatitive price, people who want to buy a car have a dificult time choosing which car in the best. If there are only one car company available at the market, People would have no other choice except buying this car despite its drow backs.
In addition to the previous point, the introduction of internet made it more difficult for younger adults to make a decision. In the past, people had been buying their priducts according to their internal guts feeling. If they feel satisfied with the products, they would buy it immidetitly without any hasitation. By introducing of information exchange through the internet, Products have became more puzzeling and more ambiguous. Unfortuniatly, people nowaday's came to a happite to check internet reviews on certain products before they buy it. Since the reviews could be missleading and confusing, young people could miss a good oportunity to buy an excellent product. For example, when I moved to Vancouver city last year, I wanted to rent an appartment. By searching online I came across to a nice appartment in a high rise building. However, when I checked the reviews, I was surprised by the negative feedbacks on that building. As a result, I did not even give it a chance to physically check the appartment. Later on a friend of mine rented that appartment and he told me that he realy enjoying the great serveces the buiding owners provided to their tanent. If I did not relay on online information, I could rent this appartment.
As a conclusion, according to what I have been discussed previousely, I asserts that young people have difficulties to make their decision copare to their peers in the past. Yound people currently are more distracted with aboundant options available on the market and deceitful information on the internet.
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Essay evaluation report
young people having difficulties to make their won decision.
young people are having difficulties to make their won decision.
young people have difficulties to make their won decision.
are more inluence with technology and social media.
are more influenced with technology and social media.
there are different car companies produce different cars style
there are different car companies to produce different cars styles
there are different car companies producing different cars styles
Sentence: By introducing of information exchange through the internet, Products have became more puzzeling and more ambiguous.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to have and became
Sentence: As a conclusion, according to what I have been discussed previousely, I asserts that young people have difficulties to make their decision copare to their peers in the past.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to I and asserts
Description: The fragment decision copare to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace copare with verb, past participle
Sentence: I beleive that young people having difficulties to make their won decision.
Error: beleive Suggestion: believe
Sentence: The basis for my views is based on the fact that yound individuals are more inluence with technology and social media.
Error: yound Suggestion: young
Error: inluence Suggestion: influence
Sentence: In contrast, young people are puzzeled from the aboundant goods and products that became avialable due to techology advancement.
Error: techology Suggestion: technology
Error: avialable Suggestion: available
Error: aboundant Suggestion: abundant
Error: puzzeled Suggestion: puzzled
Sentence: Given that there are different car companies produce different cars style with a compatitive price, people who want to buy a car have a dificult time choosing which car in the best.
Error: compatitive Suggestion: competitive
Error: dificult Suggestion: difficult
Sentence: If there are only one car company available at the market, People would have no other choice except buying this car despite its drow backs.
Error: drow Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In the past, people had been buying their priducts according to their internal guts feeling.
Error: priducts Suggestion: products
Sentence: If they feel satisfied with the products, they would buy it immidetitly without any hasitation.
Error: hasitation Suggestion: hesitation
Error: immidetitly Suggestion: imminently
Sentence: By introducing of information exchange through the internet, Products have became more puzzeling and more ambiguous.
Error: puzzeling Suggestion: puzzling
Sentence: Unfortuniatly, people nowaday's came to a happite to check internet reviews on certain products before they buy it.
Error: happite Suggestion: happily
Sentence: Since the reviews could be missleading and confusing, young people could miss a good oportunity to buy an excellent product.
Error: missleading Suggestion: misleading
Error: oportunity Suggestion: opportunity
Sentence: For example, when I moved to Vancouver city last year, I wanted to rent an appartment.
Error: appartment Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: By searching online I came across to a nice appartment in a high rise building.
Error: appartment Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a result, I did not even give it a chance to physically check the appartment.
Error: appartment Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Later on a friend of mine rented that appartment and he told me that he realy enjoying the great serveces the buiding owners provided to their tanent.
Error: realy Suggestion: rely
Error: tanent Suggestion: talent
Error: serveces Suggestion: services
Error: buiding Suggestion: building
Error: appartment Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If I did not relay on online information, I could rent this appartment.
Error: appartment Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a conclusion, according to what I have been discussed previousely, I asserts that young people have difficulties to make their decision copare to their peers in the past.
Error: copare Suggestion: compare
Error: previousely Suggestion: previously
Sentence: Yound people currently are more distracted with aboundant options available on the market and deceitful information on the internet.
Error: aboundant Suggestion: abundant
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2153 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.961 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.36 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.437 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.36 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.442 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s for my views is based on the fact that yound individuals are more inluence with...
^^
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...buying their priducts according to their internal guts feeling. If they feel sati...
^^
Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...nge through the internet, Products have became more puzzeling and more ambiguous. Unfo...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 73, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
...at I have been discussed previousely, I asserts that young people have difficulties to ...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.23640167364 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.173640167364 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0983263598326 0.0866891130778 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355648535565 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0690376569038 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115062761506 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0502092050209 0.0351676179071 143% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78344447136 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0418410041841 0.0309702414327 135% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.092050209205 0.0887237588012 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0125523012552 0.0209618222197 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0125523012552 0.0139019557991 90% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2644.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 434.0 408.028673835 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09216589862 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375576036866 0.338922669872 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276497695853 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225806451613 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152073732719 0.112833075102 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78344447136 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529953917051 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 61.0710699589 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.36 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4431622596 48.84282405 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.76 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.36 20.5533526081 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.28 0.644075263715 43% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 45.0097695853 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.44360902256 1.45489161554 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396594121921 0.300154397459 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.080991994617 0.103427244359 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0792888573169 0.0752933317313 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.424934019092 0.497263757937 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130336856513 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130965319411 0.114077575197 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719330679462 0.0781384742642 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.33221918558 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0823227432818 0.067059652881 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288052399814 0.210909579961 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670849090093 0.0618886996521 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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