tpo45
Life is a burdensome path full of ups and downs, and human beings encounter with many problems, which necessitate certain crucial decisions. With this in mind, some believe that nowadays, young people are less dependent to their parents in order to make decisions about their own lives in comparison to the past, while others hold the opposite view. I, personally, subscribe to the first attitude based on quite a few reasons, three of the most substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that the 20th and 21st are considered as the knowledge and technology era, and our lifestyle, as it is commonly perceived, has been affected by the galloping rate of technology development offering a more convenient life. The Internet is one of the greatest incomes of technology advancement, which has brought mankind about a great amount of first-handed information. Therefore, the youth can have access to a lot of information only by a button. I clarify my point of view with a real story that happened to me. Four years ago, when I wanted to attend university, I had a difficulty to find a proper university. I just surfed the net, and collect numerous information about various colleges in my country, and then I managed to opt for the best one in the blink of an eye. If I wanted to consult with my parents, it took me a lot of time.
Another interpretation as to why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that it is statistically proven that the level of education in the past was lower than in the present time, since the educational system was poor in the past; however, people enjoy state-of-the-art educational equipment and more skill for teachers, which indicates that individuals nowadays, have a better understanding about issues than those in the past; hence, they can make better decisions about various issues. The more knowledgeable one is, the more successful he or she will be. As a result, the youth can make better decisions compare to their parents, and thus be more prosperous.
Last but not least, the youth have less commitment to traditions and customs because most of them consider traditions as an obstacle, which prevents them from development. So, the tradition that young people should consult with their parents in order to make decisions is obsoleted.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned arguments discussed above, I firmly endorse my point of view that in today's world, young people have more freedom to make decision about their own lives compare to before on the grounds that not only are they more knowledgeable, thanks to better educational system, but also they have access to great amount of information due to technology advancement. Moreover, they do not have commitment to traditions, which make them to obey from their parents’ thoughts.
- Tpo 18. 86
- it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to have specialize in one specific subject 86
- For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 70
- tpo 27 60
- Is it more important for students to learn ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts 86
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'in summary', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216666666667 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.137037037037 0.158761421928 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101851851852 0.0866891130778 117% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0537037037037 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.062962962963 0.0685040099705 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12962962963 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0277777777778 0.0351676179071 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.95642571158 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0388888888889 0.0309702414327 126% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0888888888889 0.0887237588012 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00925925925926 0.0209618222197 44% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0166666666667 0.0139019557991 120% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2896.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 482.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00829875519 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.329875518672 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255186721992 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197095435685 0.174417080927 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.157676348548 0.112833075102 140% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95642571158 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522821576763 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 61.8904954531 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 28.3529411765 20.5533526081 138% => OK
Sentence length SD: 123.627636019 48.84282405 253% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.352941176 120.699889404 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3529411765 20.5533526081 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.882352941176 0.644075263715 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 53.8716133756 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.47445255474 1.45489161554 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106890354665 0.103427244359 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0679374816761 0.0752933317313 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.544540312638 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17953226327 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.380081328253 0.336927656856 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0588933087437 0.067059652881 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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