“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin"
While it is advisable for every country to be wary of intruders, the authors implications from the restraining illegal immigrant to a country being autonomous is very vague.The argument is not cogent enough to believe that making efforts to send back illegal immigrants can make that particular country autonomous. This particular conclusion is being made on number of unsubstantiated assumptions the author made.
Firstly, country being autonomous has many factors, as in, the potential imports and exports , living standards of people, ability of government to stabilize and improve the economy and many others. This has nothing to do with strength of its borders.The possible interpretations of strength of borders could be, power of the army,border patrol strength and the technological advancements like cc cameras and intruder detection algorithms used by the country. None of these have a direct relation to the autonomous nature of the country as well. The author could benefit from being more specific about, the strength of borders and its direct or indirect relation to autonomous nature of country. Author could even strengthen this, by giving an example where the country is autonomous due to its borders strength.
In addition, author is making a direct correlation between preventing the illegal immigrants from entering the country and it’s economy and identity. The author is making the same mistake as pointed out in above paragraph. The economy depends on numerous factors such as, imports and exports, natural and human resources, social organisation, political freedom and many more. National identity depends on the deed the country carries out, the kind of ethics they follow , the way they project themselves – take the case of Bhutan, it projects itself as a carbon negative country and it measures the national GDP in terms of the happiness of their citizens. Author could benefit from ,linking the illegal immigrants to national identity and economy with more evidence as in, giving some direct negative effects of allowing illegal immigrants on economy or positive effects of checking illegal immigrants on national identity.
Building upon the implication, that the illegal immigrants pose threat to the national identity and economy, author makes another statement as, to send back the illegal immigrants to their own country. As this is a conclusion drawn from a fallacious assumption, from first order logic, this statement is also a false one. One can observe that, author is inconsistent in his statements , initially he talked about country being autonomous and then went into another direction of national identity. Author could stick to one point and explain the same in more detail instead of expressing many possible effects of illegal immigrants.
In conclusion, Country has to strengthen its people ,economy, ethics to become autonomous.While stopping the illegal immigrants can make the people of the country feel more safer and work or move freely in the country, which in turn may lead to a better economy, but just stopping illegal immigrants can’t make a country autonomous. However, this author’s argument is not significantly persuasive to take strong measures to stop any illegal immigrants.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260945709282 0.240241500013 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.134851138354 0.157235817809 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.129597197898 0.0880659088768 147% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0297723292469 0.0497285424764 60% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0280210157618 0.0444667217837 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112084063047 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0402802101576 0.0406280797675 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91386271548 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332749562172 0.030933414821 108% => OK
Particles: 0.00525394045534 0.0016655270985 315% => OK
Determiners: 0.103327495622 0.0997080785238 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175131348511 0.0249443105267 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00350262697023 0.0148568991511 24% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3326.0 2732.02544248 122% => OK
No of words: 510.0 452.878318584 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.52156862745 6.0361032391 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.454901960784 0.366273622748 124% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.372549019608 0.280924506359 133% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241176470588 0.200843997647 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149019607843 0.132149295362 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91386271548 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 219.290929204 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476470588235 0.48968727796 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.4874066004 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.3333333333 23.380412469 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.7051859459 59.4972553346 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.777777778 141.124799967 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 23.380412469 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.674092028746 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.21349557522 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 65.5882352941 51.4728631049 127% => OK
Elegance: 2.14545454545 1.64882698954 130% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.535282338464 0.391690518653 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.167363197054 0.123202303941 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0985747141839 0.077325440228 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603543623693 0.547984918172 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157925339899 0.149214159877 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234800873577 0.161403998019 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983481695792 0.0892212321368 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.447573019479 0.385218514788 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0566688682083 0.0692045440612 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.365957202651 0.275328986314 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632941141177 0.0653680567796 97% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 3.66592920354 246% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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