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This argument concludes Techcoroporation is our top pick forinvestment this term.we argu all of our clients to invents to invest in this new company for the first time in ten year,a comapny that has developed satellite technology has been approved by FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is techoroporation.Aconsumer survey last year indicated that over eighty pecent of respondent were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techoropration into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invbest now.However auther's claim sepends opon poor assumtion and is there have unprevsuosive as it stands.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246290801187 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.181008902077 0.15541462614 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.115727002967 0.0836205057962 138% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0652818991098 0.0520304965353 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0326409495549 0.0272364105082 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115727002967 0.125424944231 92% => OK
Participles: 0.026706231454 0.0416121511921 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.21076111254 2.79052419416 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0385756676558 0.026700313972 144% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0830860534125 0.113004496875 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0148367952522 0.0255425247493 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0237388724036 0.0127820249294 186% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2089.0 2731.13054187 76% => OK
No of words: 322.0 446.07635468 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.48757763975 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.388198757764 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.341614906832 0.287650121315 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.257763975155 0.208842608468 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.189440993789 0.135150697306 140% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21076111254 2.79052419416 115% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549689440994 0.469332199767 117% => OK
Word variations: 58.5640067419 52.1807786196 112% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.039408867 45% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 35.7777777778 23.2022227129 154% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5301129459 57.7814097925 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 232.111111111 141.986410481 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7777777778 23.2022227129 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 0.724660767414 199% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 69.939268461 51.9672348444 135% => OK
Elegance: 1.39361702128 1.8405768891 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396163175551 0.441005458295 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143604514785 0.135418324435 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0757903161499 0.0829849096947 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.693722999966 0.58762219726 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.208195312439 0.147661913831 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184523180004 0.193483328276 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159258810586 0.0970749176394 164% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281152210654 0.42659136922 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0399698635576 0.0774707102158 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219618725899 0.312017818177 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142193995503 0.0698173142475 204% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 8.0 14.657635468 55% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.