A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
Many would say that every student in a country should be educated with the same curriculum before entering college. However, in this essay the general statement that many people gives will be refuted with some plausible reasons.
Admittingly, getting the same education before college makes an equivalent base for students. When high school students get into college, they will have to choose a concentration, a major. From then, they will be focusing on that particular major and be less focused on other subjects.This will lead to an unbalance in the knowledge. And, since students have no real knowledge of the subject they are interested in, they should be educated on various subjects to choose what they really want to focus on throughout their rest of the lives.The same curriculum gives an equal chance for the students to choose their major in college. Therefore, getting the same education before college could be said to be a good idea for people.
However, same education for everyone might be bootless. There are subjects that we have learned in the early days that are not utilized in our daily lives Thus, it could be a waste of time to study on the irrelevent issue that we do not concentrate on. Moreover, when students are young, they are easily bored with studying a subject that they are not interested in. Meanwhile, students could be lacking interest in the overall studying, which includes the subject that one had really interest in.To prevent students to deviate from being a nation's intelligent, usefu, and leading people, students should be given the opportunity to focus on what they are interested in. For example, Einstein who had abjured the early days of study, which every other students in his same age were required to take classes for, would be the most successful person in that time of the period.
Moreover, in the case of Germany, there is a technician school. This school aims for a useful blue collar worker for its nation, rather than studying normal subjects such as Math, Science, and all the subjects that we normally take before college. The latter aims for a scholar. However, every nation does not need every student to become a scholar. There should be workers who fix and make products, as well. Moreover, Germany is a nation that is famous for good electronics and cars, such as Panasonic, BMW, and Mercedes Benz. Therefore, students should have the right to choose what they want to study before getting into college.
In summary, I believe that students should not be required to study the same curriculum with every other students even if they have no interested in. Implementing the education as this way would be more efficient to have a balanced intelligent workers to lead the country.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: There are subjects that we have learned in the early days that are not utilized in our daily lives Thus, it could be a waste of time to study on the irrelevent issue that we do not concentrate on.
Error: irrelevent Suggestion: irrelevant
Sentence: Meanwhile, students could be lacking interest in the overall studying, which includes the subject that one had really interest in.To prevent students to deviate from being a nation's intelligent, usefu, and leading people, students should be given the opportunity to focus on what they are interested in.
Error: usefu Suggestion: useful
flaws:
It is not good to put an example as a paragraph, like that in the fourth paragraph. Examples are used to support ideas, better like this:
paragraph 4: In addition, reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2222 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.423 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.354 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.762 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...r and be less focused on other subjects.This will lead to an unbalance in the knowle...
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Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...s on throughout their rest of the lives.The same curriculum gives an equal chance f...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that are not utilized in our daily lives Thus, it could be a waste of time to stu...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'interested'.
Suggestion: interested
...ncludes the subject that one had really interest in.To prevent students to deviate from ...
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Line 5, column 499, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...subject that one had really interest in.To prevent students to deviate from being ...
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Line 5, column 541, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
... prevent students to deviate from being a nations intelligent, usefu, and leading people...
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Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... nations intelligent, usefu, and leading people, students should be given the opp...
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Line 9, column 245, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'worker'?
Suggestion: worker
...fficient to have a balanced intelligent workers to lead the country.
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'in summary', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.195357833656 0.240241500013 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.174081237911 0.157235817809 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0986460348162 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0522243713733 0.0497285424764 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0386847195358 0.0444667217837 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127659574468 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0425531914894 0.0406280797675 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5446522914 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309477756286 0.030933414821 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.100580270793 0.0997080785238 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0328820116054 0.0249443105267 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212765957447 0.0148568991511 143% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2766.0 2732.02544248 101% => OK
No of words: 463.0 452.878318584 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97408207343 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349892008639 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269978401728 0.280924506359 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.198704103672 0.200843997647 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0950323974082 0.132149295362 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5446522914 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 219.290929204 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462203023758 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.8215705203 55.4138127331 94% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0476190476 23.380412469 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9589322639 59.4972553346 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.714285714 141.124799967 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 23.380412469 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.619047619048 0.674092028746 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 49.0454592204 51.4728631049 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.3795620438 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356649594274 0.391690518653 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.148035779228 0.123202303941 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0933189967779 0.077325440228 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.512990521809 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.178794818021 0.149214159877 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136527951166 0.161403998019 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830003069974 0.0892212321368 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.33274903357 0.385218514788 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.09843779714 0.0692045440612 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238089369288 0.275328986314 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620923517154 0.0653680567796 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88274336283 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.