The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizen meet the current standard of adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, half of all Corpora's citizen met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizen less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's usually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Medical experts made an irrelevant by citing that only one quarter of the Corpora's citizens meet the standards of physical fitness. There are no fitness standards mentioned by the medical experts by which they can rate the physical fitness of an individual.There are no basis laid for an individual to b physically fit.
Also, the medical experts compare today's fitness with the fitness of the individual 20 years ago. It is true that with the change in living trends over past decades, a vast change has been noticed in the fitness of the person. With the change in eating habits and more inclination towards the contemporary food items, the fitness of an individual is highy effected. But comparing today's fitness standards with the standards defined twenty years ago is obtuse.
Again, the figure of fitness indicated decades ago can no way be compared to current figure as there are many factors which may affect a person's fitness. May be, the citizens in that era had more spare time which they could have utilised for morning or evening walks or gym or yoga. Or the possibilty that the contemporary food items were not introduced in the market. Also, the people would not be so loaded with the work because of which they were relaxed and were able to get enogh sleep whereas now the citizens are overloaded with work, thus, compromising their leisure time to relax which in turn impacts they fitness.There is also a possibility that there were some fitness sessions organized for citizens of Corpora to encourage people to give fitness the priority and no such encouragement is followed now.
The author makes a vague assumption that computers are not the reasons for inadequate fitness of the citizen. There is no clear picture depicted or the standards defined which can state the overall fitness is highest among the citizens of Corpora where computers are highly owned. Owning a computer does not relate his work. There may be many cases where the computer in owned by the citizen but he may not at all using it.
Linking fitness with economy is another tangential cite. People may not buy a fitness product as they may already own it or they may not require it. A person persuing yoga for fitness may not require any expensive fitness related equipments.
It can be the case that there may be some free membership offers ongoing where might have enrolled themselves and thus they need not require to shell for any fitness related products or services.
It may sound true that the economy has declined but the decline of fitness with economy is completely inconsequential. If the fitness if truly implied on the economy then there may be possibility that the economy never rise or it may take
years to rise and waiting for that long will surely impact people's fitness.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'whereas', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236111111111 0.25644967241 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.178571428571 0.15541462614 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0753968253968 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0615079365079 0.0520304965353 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0357142857143 0.0272364105082 131% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111111111111 0.125424944231 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0575396825397 0.0416121511921 138% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54395283591 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.015873015873 0.026700313972 59% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.121031746032 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0376984126984 0.0255425247493 148% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0178571428571 0.0127820249294 140% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2781.0 2731.13054187 102% => OK
No of words: 476.0 446.07635468 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84243697479 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346638655462 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285714285714 0.287650121315 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.136554621849 0.208842608468 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0840336134454 0.135150697306 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54395283591 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 207.018472906 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478991596639 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 54.6669598513 52.1807786196 105% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.8 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.1345694577 57.7814097925 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.05 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.45 0.724660767414 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.14285714286 156% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 52.3714285714 51.9672348444 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.46762589928 1.8405768891 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333448372677 0.441005458295 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.15545888107 0.135418324435 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.098423971418 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.670018321143 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.194220562857 0.147661913831 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146608506742 0.193483328276 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941259332276 0.0970749176394 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281392460569 0.42659136922 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.122982762151 0.0774707102158 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172460250705 0.312017818177 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106064840489 0.0698173142475 152% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.