The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well-being of that country's citizens.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The given issue states that the best way to measure a political leader's effectiveness is to examine well-being of citizens who are ruled by a leader. There is no doubt that this sentence embraces the whole truth about this issue. The issue claims a wise thing to do - measure a leader's effectiveness only by well-being of citizens. Perhaps, it should be the only one way how to measure their effectiveness.
In order to support the statement, it will be wise to appeal to the history of ancient tribes, where a future social structure was an incipient phenomenon. According to many scientific data, it quite explicitly states that a tribal's leader had quite a clear obligation - to ensure existing of members of a tribe. For example, if a tribe had suffered from starvation because of a bad crop, a leader of this tribe could be easily killed or expelled from a tribe, because he did not ensure a tribe well-being. Certainly, such leader had a mythological function rather he worked on fields. However, in this historical example explicitly states a role model of leader who rules a society. Hence, the given issue, in this regard, seems reasoanble and historically justified.
Considering the history of the past 20 century, it could be easily found examples when some countries seemed powerful and mighty, however, its citizens were unhappy to live in such a country. Unfortunately, the twenty century had a lot of such examples. For instance, the world after the Second World War had been divided on two main camps: democrats and communists. Such challenging position propeled the Soviet Union to force its military and cosmic expansion, and they did it well. However, ordinary citizens still had a lot of problems with civil rights, equal opportunities, and even with a food provision. However, at the same time, the USSR seemed the country, which is so effective in military race. But, for the citizens of the USSR such race did provide them a simple well-being. Hence, in this regard, the proposed issue is wise to follow.
In contrary, it could be a situation when the given claim might be false. It is horrible periods of wars. During wars, the only way to measure a political effecitvenes of a leader is a win. Unfortunately, in such horrible cases, well-being of simple citizens is not considered at all.
To sum up, there is no doubt that given statement is true and reasonable to measure the political effectiveness of a leader, because, it is the only aim of any honest leader - well being of ordinary people. However, during wars, such logic could be reconsidered.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Hence, the given issue, in this regard, seems reasoanble and historically justified.
Error: reasoanble Suggestion: reasonable
Sentence: Such challenging position propeled the Soviet Union to force its military and cosmic expansion, and they did it well.
Error: propeled Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: During wars, the only way to measure a political effecitvenes of a leader is a win.
Error: effecitvenes Suggestion: effectiveness
flaws:
For GRE issue essays, better always support/against one side. We may consider TLPE:
T means Time: Put the essay topic in a 'history' to see it works or not. for example: a country has already been very rich with good well-being, so we can't see the effectiveness of a country's leaders nowadays.
L means Location: some counties have good resources such as oil, not because of the effectiveness of a country's leaders.
P means People: Some leaders can still be considered as good leaders without good well-beings. for example, some leaders in developing countries
E means Event: like in war, your fourth paragraph
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2074 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.746 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.735 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.208 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.206 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thank you very much for the
Thank you very much for the evaluation.
However, I have one question.
You said that "For GRE issue essays, better always support/against one side", but the task was "be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position", and I tried to follow the task.
OR am I wrong?
Thanks)
For any topic, you can either
For any topic, you can either support it, or against it, or partly support/against.
Some users like to argue partly, and keep a balance. But actually it won't work since we only have 30 minutes we can't argue greatly for any one side.
When we support or against only one side, it is easier to write and the arguments are stronger. This is actually what ETS wants, and most top users are following this rule.
Thank you very much for the
Thank you very much for the answer.
So, even if the task has " be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position" sentence. It is better to ignore the task and support a chosen side and do not argue against own arguments? In this case, ETS will not decrease the score?
Thanks in advance!
We didn't get your point
We didn't get your point exactly:
It is better to ignore the task and support a chosen side and do not argue against own arguments
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for this task:
The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well-being of that country's citizens.
either we agree, then Yes, A is best measured by B
or disagree, then No, A is not best measured by B
or partly: A is best measured by B sometimes
This is a wrong pattern. It is ready argue on both side:
para 1: introduction. A is sometime best measured by B, sometime not, or measured by C
para 2: A is best measured by B.
para 3: however, A is not best measured by B sometimes, or measured by c
para 4: conclusion. no idea at all.
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This is the pattern we suggested:
paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support A is best measured by B .
paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).
paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).
paragraph 4: Some people may argue that A is not best measured by B, or it is best measured by C (for example, artiest, scientists, leaders...). First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support A is best measured by B. first,....second...
paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.
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Look at the paragraph 4, you can argue a little bit on another side too, but not too much. Still go back to your side A.
Let us know if you have more questions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...hat the best way to measure a political leaders effectiveness is to examine well-being ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...e claims a wise thing to do - measure a leaders effectiveness only by well-being of cit...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
... Considering the history of the past 20 century, it could be easily found examples when...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'no doubt', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223552894212 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.145708582834 0.157235817809 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.107784431138 0.0880659088768 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0499001996008 0.0497285424764 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0299401197605 0.0444667217837 67% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10379241517 0.12292977631 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0359281437126 0.0406280797675 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85935376014 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299401197605 0.030933414821 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00199600798403 0.0016655270985 120% => OK
Determiners: 0.12375249501 0.0997080785238 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0139720558882 0.0249443105267 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0139720558882 0.0148568991511 94% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2592.0 2732.02544248 95% => OK
No of words: 440.0 452.878318584 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89090909091 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356818181818 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263636363636 0.280924506359 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190909090909 0.200843997647 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111363636364 0.132149295362 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85935376014 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 219.290929204 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 58.2315359521 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3333333333 23.380412469 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6826120276 59.4972553346 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 141.124799967 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 23.380412469 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 44.696969697 51.4728631049 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.61061946903 1.64882698954 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453675533401 0.391690518653 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108747155354 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715230707653 0.077325440228 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.481605654323 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15233499124 0.149214159877 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158476163978 0.161403998019 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854955429897 0.0892212321368 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.340133972491 0.385218514788 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0724669910009 0.0692045440612 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293744680508 0.275328986314 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672695506166 0.0653680567796 103% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.