The sports stars and movie stars are the ones whose work is seen by masses. Unlike politicians or bureaucrats who are confine to work in offices, they are easily hated or admired by a large group of people. Also, they earn millions of dollars and play role models for many.
All sports stars and movie stars have wide fan following on social media. Also they are exclusively and unflaggingly chased by media and hence their social life becomes available to public. While public rejoices on everything they get to know about their favorite stars, they are also deeply influenced by their lifestyle. This means that all these stars have a wide audience who is waiting for anything which gets aggregated for them, by the media. Hence this itself becomes a ground which must drive the stars to portray themselves as quixotic.
Due to this influence they have, everything from their style statements, dialogues, real life behaviors, interests are widely repeated by their followers. Hence they do have a moral responsibility to choose their vices carefully if any. For example if a movie star like Salman Khan is blamed for rash driving, or illegal hunting, the same would become a dream of their followers. In order to feel like him, they will also try to be the king of the roads and go all rash. If every other movie star keeps divorcing, rather then tackling or solving their problems, every follower would think that divorce is a better option. This is totally uncalled for. This also goes on to abstain from carousing, drug abuse and so on which is very common among celebrities these days.
By leading a life which is exemplary for others and indulging in the community issues which every country has, a star can prove himself/herself to be a very good role model for their followers. Since they earn hefty amount of income, they do have a good amount of resource which they can put to use by catering to betterment of the society. This would not only create more good people in the society, by being good examples, but also have a good life for themselves.
Therefore celebrities should rather indulge in doing good for society outside their field of work and become a good source of inspiration for their followers.
- "Sports stars & movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility." - Write a response 66
- An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...sses. Unlike politicians or bureaucrats who are confine to work in offices, they are ea...
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Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ave wide fan following on social media. Also they are exclusively and unflaggingly c...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...gets aggregated for them, by the media. Hence this itself becomes a ground which must...
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Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...are widely repeated by their followers. Hence they do have a moral responsibility to ...
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Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...ther movie star keeps divorcing, rather then tackling or solving their problems, eve...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...so have a good life for themselves. Therefore celebrities should rather indulge in do...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229857819905 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.170616113744 0.157235817809 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0710900473934 0.0880659088768 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0521327014218 0.0497285424764 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0687203791469 0.0444667217837 155% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.127962085308 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0450236966825 0.0406280797675 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42661077881 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0284360189573 0.030933414821 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0876777251185 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0189573459716 0.0249443105267 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.021327014218 0.0148568991511 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2231.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 385.0 452.878318584 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79480519481 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.288311688312 0.366273622748 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.202597402597 0.280924506359 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137662337662 0.200843997647 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0961038961039 0.132149295362 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42661077881 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 219.290929204 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535064935065 0.48968727796 109% => OK
Word variations: 59.5995522445 55.4138127331 108% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2631578947 23.380412469 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7798674101 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.421052632 141.124799967 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 23.380412469 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.473684210526 0.674092028746 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 40.5228981545 51.4728631049 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.38211382114 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362782376054 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114731698836 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.071593287339 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.495718745776 0.547984918172 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153270441129 0.149214159877 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134039086212 0.161403998019 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520547425064 0.0892212321368 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.308040634915 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0184618126576 0.0692045440612 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224032748481 0.275328986314 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686922999108 0.0653680567796 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.